by greenmountaineer
Excellent. Now either Vrojse or I should take you to the cricket.
while it is always a good tactic to put dumb words in someone else's mouth "That's all very good, Master Smith..." I feel it is a strong 8 line poem about the Dodgers, but a mediocre sonnet about I'm not really sure.
...paraphrase - "they fuck us up, our elders do." Many an aspiring artist of one kind or another has had his/her candle of inspiration snuffed unintentionally by a careless word. As has been said, it's a good thing yours wasn't.
Tess
a living, breathing, heart-pounding poem and crushed the very life out of it trying to fit it into a straightjacket. the poem - the boy
we are lucky the boy took up writing again...
solid 5