All Comments on 'Why Must You Turn So?'

as to what you are trying to do, will all the tossing and retching about, and then you throw in a poetic reach with "susurrus" when something like whispering would do just as well. On the plus side, I've not seen anything like it. We'll start small, if you are dreaming of becoming a fan,

"that I may never open." sounds like you would be trying to open yourself, how about "that will not open"? Just a suggestion. New Writer 5