All Comments on 'Winds of Passion'

This is basically a prose piece needing a bit more punctuation and while some flash fiction and prose poetry are alike, this lacks the density I look for in prose poetry. I think if you worked more toward showing what happened rather than just telling me a series of events it would be much more poetic.

jim : )

This was too story-like for me, and I couldn't feel, taste or smell. I need that!