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Click hereWith-zen~
I sit
'with-zen'
my own mind
at my desk
looking at nothing
thinking of everything
'with-zen' my knowledge
satisfying
my tranquility
with mountain lakes
and streams
'with-zen' the trees
never
giving thought
to hurricanes,
volcanoes and tornadoes
mother nature's clash
with-zen
When
I spilt 'hot' coffee
in my lap
it was 'with-zen' my legs
I screamed
with-zen
even though you are trying to capture a wholeness to the experience, i'm thinking it would pack far more punch if you went with this persay:
I sit
'with-zen'
my own mind
at my desk
looking at nothing
thinking of everything
'with-zen' my knowledge
When
I spilt 'hot' coffee
in my lap
it was 'with-zen' my legs
I screamed
with-zen
it's an option art.....don
I like it ZMA but didnot know about it all. Alicia says with-zen is a pun and says wizen and within to! VERY good and much better to like alot!! Thankyou!!
Regardless of the apocalyptic events or not, it is a good read, different and moving. I love the hypocrisy of the "fan club" commentor! There is nobody here that doesn't have a few people who like them and look forward to reading their posts. Keep up the inspiring work...
part of your "fan club"
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I found this humourous but I have to agree that the ending was the strength of this poem. I would leave out the tornado etc part while I will not say and do not feel that it was needed to say it sucks I feel it is not needed for the work. The poem will have as much laughter with out it...we all have room to grow and you are learning this my friend. Nice morning laugh!
blessings
Du~