All Comments on 'Words'

Hey! I like a lot of this, but it feels like it needs a little more work, maybe a few changes. At first I didn't like candelabras in this poem. It seemed like a fat ass on a skinny woman, but you may like that sort of thing. I guess it works okay, though. Anyway, thanks for the read. :)

Beautiful ...

Thanks for the share, tt2u!

Tender and wistful with some well chosen phrases all bound together smoothly. I like.

Tess

this verse:

"the repetition of reality

moments once realized, now a shadow

which exist only with moonlight

three glasses of wine and want"

I know exactly how that feels.

The last verse is the strongest as far as emotional content, and ties it up nicely.

A few different word choices would strengthen it up immensely.

Don't abandon this one.

Thanks for the read