All Comments on 'World Knot'

one should never that repitition past three, unless there is either a very good reason for it, or uses variants.

Here in your own words:

The world is not a factory; it destroys what it creates.

The world is not a product; all literary packaging is in vain.

The world is not an artwork; its beauties are incidental.

this begins to make a point, that is missed, by continuing.

lets try something else

The world is not a product; all literary packaging is in vain.

The world is not a factory; it destroys what it creates.

The world is not art; its beauty is existence.

this is better, no? 3rd is variant, begins to take on a visual, last point being more emphasized? These are questions I am asking.

I do not see the purpose of Knot in the title

I did not vote on this (I think)

a list of what the world is not

I think the point/list is a wonderful

way to play out a poem and that it worked

well in this piece. Thanks sean~

One way to avoid the repetition of the negative, is midway through to start revealing what the world IS. That could end the poem on a more positive note and make the whole structure less restrictive.

I wish I knew if you were looking for suggestions (from me) on your writing. I feel like I could help you give this poem the chance to become what it is meant to be.