All Comments on 'You'

Needs a bit of editing to tighten it up ~ use of "you" is too overdone. As an easy example with the first strophe:

"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,

And you shelter me until I settle.

You are that nonmoving foundation on which I've begun to grow roots,

A steadfast presence in my life and my heart."

Could be tightened up a bit:

"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,

Then shelter me until I settle.

You are that foundation where I've begun to grow roots,

A steadfast presence in my life and heart."

Message tends to get lost with all the repeated appearances of "you."

healing power of love..