by PlayfulLittle1
1. Syllable count and stress - your verses are uneven so they distract from rhythm.
2. Punctuation - you miss apostrophes as in cute kitten cloak - kitten's or cloak's?
3. Reverse phrasing - looks clumsy unless done really cleverly, rather than as a quick fix as you seem to do at line 4.
4. Read this aloud and check how it flows.
Sweet O.
I love the contrast here between the pet's sweet submission and the fact that she also puts up plenty of fight. Sounds like that really turns them both on.