All Comments on 'Your Ice Wind'

You have some clichés with your burning, lust, and soul, but it works in this poem. I started to cringe as I approached each possibly clichéd word, but I was surprised at how you used them in this fresh piece of writing. Could this poem be improved? Sure. But overall, it's good.

Your piece was a bit disjointed, and I don't think that was your intention. You have some great images, and I like the concept of the ice wind. I'd try breaking it up into more than one stanza, and read it out loud. I find when I do that, rough bits are more obvious.