All Comments on '$18.47'

It was OK, nice story but seemed very rushed. Everything happened very fast, they were in love in days. Can't help but feel that two people who have been living on the streets for several years would be much more reserved and cautious.

And did the man who owns a billion dollar company really get married to a woman he hardly knows without a prenup?

A very nice romantic story… But sadly, the reality of being homeless for years will leave many more physical, mental, emotional, social, and spiritual scars than can heal in a matter of days… I’m reminded of the sad story of porn star Jenni Lee…

I thought it was a hell of a lot better than OK! Firstly, I love the cultural tones - I grew up in Jersey and actually read your text with an accent! Oh Vey!

And I think that we should approach stories understanding that they can be true to life without being factual - the active suspension of disbelief - they do it on Broadway every night.

And the stereotypes had value - the master of the universe and all his money and minions - just make a call. The woman who is sleeping on a riverbank afraid of rape or the kidnap of a daughter.

Those stereotypes are real life for some people.

And I remembered Rosie Silverman who had hot chocolate for her paperboy on snowy days, and the young army wife at fort Benning who wanted to know where my wife got potato salad - duh!

So, schmuck that I am - I saw all the things your critic saw but I cried anyway,

Sweet, warm, human, hopeful - a lovely seasonal story. Thank you

Nicely done. Great Christmas love story. Everyone deserves a fantasy life! Cheers. Frankie

A good Christmas story full of hope and joy, liked the way it spanned religions. Language may have been a little stilted in places and there seemed a rush from meeting to marriage but it's a Christmas story. 5 from me

Merry Christmas. That was a wonderful, if fast paced love story. Believable? Maybe. Who cares. I loved it. Five hankies. And, five stars.

Fantastic story. I enjoy all your work, please keep writing.

This is a fine story, with interesting characters. My only quibble is that compared to the lives you were creating, the sex scenes were both superfluous and perfunctory. They had sex pretty much like all the other couples on this site, but your story had so much more going for it that I found myself skimming and skipping the sex to get back to the people.

Of course, everybody is SO good that they might be too perfect. But I like stories about good people doing good things.

I also wish that in the denouement you had taken Mary off the pill and given them a couple more children.

It could have been a good story if it wasn't moving at warp speed and too far fetched to believe. Yes, it's a fantasy story, but there has to be some believability in order to enjoy it as a romance. Otherwise put it in Sci-Fi.

Wonderful story. Well written. Excellent job of keeping up with the chronology. Not easy to do.

“So Mary, what first attracted you to billionaire Ben?”

So sweet it gave me cavities, but I’m a sucker for a bit of Hallmark mush. 5* from me 🥰

Great story. Had me crying. This is one fantasy that came true. Great for holiday reading.

Good pace and build up to some awesome sex. Everyone should have a little fantasy in their lives. Nice, easy read.

Fantastic read. Thanks

Other than a few minor issues with the her and his mix ups ,, great overall work and a 5⭐️ story

A delightful tale!

5

A very feel good story that uplifts the spirit. We need more of that now than in the recent past. I need to read more of your work.

Rich dude buys family, escapes all dramatic tension while making an absolute mockery of courtship and romance.

A lovely story for the holidays. It being thanksgiving next week, I think the 14th century mystic Meister Eckard had the right idea: If the only prayer you ever say in your entire life is ‘Thank you’, it will be enough.

I have nothing against rich people. I wish I were one. I do have something against stories where every problem can be easily handled because the MC just happens to have a few billion dollars to throw at the problems.

Fairytale plot but too abrupt. Just buy homeless people a ton of clothes when they expect to back on the streets tomorrow?

A lovely heartwarming piece of escapism

Nice

Tedious and pretentious

The idea behind the story is good but the way you're telling it sucks. Ever hear of contractions? Try using them. Always write dialogue the way people actually speak. Your dialogue reads like Data from Star Trek TNG. Very boring. And you're also repetitive in what you write. 2*

I really like the premise of the story, and the characters were interesting. I think the plot was just too compressed. It all happened too quickly, with way too much money being thrown around.

I liked the story even if it was a whirlwind romance. You did have a few issues with the story though. In his past he meets Dr. Cindy but than she moves, he had a wife and son that died in a car accident 3 years ago. You never explained if Cindy was the wife or someone different. there is really no detail about son and wife at all. If they weren't the same person not sure the mention of Cindy was needed. If they were the same person you should have gave more details about how they got back together, married and had a son. Also the story breaks ]]]]]] we're not always correctly used in my opinion. Otherwise good story.

Really nice. Heartwarming story. It would be nice if people were more like this in real life.

The story was great and the author deserves a high rating.

Before the author's head swells, I need to say his style needs some work.

A bit choppy and I think he writes in too much sex so that the story stagnates in places. Almost erotic coupling.

Yet it is a good read.

This really pulled the heart strings. Not the areas i was hoping for when logging into litereotica, but the sensitive spots that needed some healing.

So thanks,

Thanks for reminding me that im not the only one with dreams of being "mary"

Entertaining and highly erotic. Great story for this time of the year. Ok

A nice holiday read. Why the NY children’s services hadn’t taken Callieinto custody is strange.

Almost interesting. The fact that it appears the author does not really know the homeless or the ultra rich comes through too often in the story.

The sex scenes were OK if a little predictable.

BRS

Very average compared to other stories of a similar nature, she had almost no fear of what could happen or street awareness and in reality wouldn’t have lasted a week on the street before ending up on a mortuary slab, with the daughter either being a mule or turning tricks on a corner doped up to her eyeballs. Sad but true. 3⭐️

I personally loved every minute of this story. Definitely 5 stars in my book. I was always waiting for the shoe to drop, but am very happy with the story with a happy ending. Maybe it's not based in reality of what the situation would be, but if that was the case it wouldn't be the perfect Winter Story. Magic and dreams can come true. Loved it!!

Fun story. Some complain about accuracy. Big deal. That's just research.

But an author's insight into the perfect twists.

The first card Mary received: stunning.

The card they returned to Ben: so simple.

The Birthday card? Perfect.

That's three for three on tears for this reader.

Adorable. I love how vulnerable Ben allows himself to be. I also love all of the NY references. Fun!

Loved the story - could have make this a much longer tale and build up was was very good anyway.

Easily spread this out to a novella length.

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