All Comments on '18th Birthday'

really enjoyed this, it had a feel to it that made it feel like it was a very real experience. Thank you for posting this!

How refreshing to read a story hear which is well written and sounds true.

Thank you.

that was the worst story eva

not the worst story ever but it needs more 2 it yeah we know they ran into each other but they should at least hook up again but other than that i give it 3 in a half stars :)

although, this is your work, i have no right to judge, but i will give some suggestions

please, add more details

try not to end on a weak give up. it seems as if you no longer cared for your work and just said 'whatever'

take more pride in your work

these are only suggestions, dont change your work if you dont want to.

-Jamie