All Comments on '2nd Story'

I loved this story. It held my interest to the very end, which added an unexpected twist. Great job!

You used Prologue twice in this story, once at the beginning and once towards the end. Did you mean to have the second one be the epilogue? Thanks for sharing your story.

I was rewarded for reading a 4 page story. Awesome lesbian celebration of sexuality. There is something about the Italian family concept that I liked a lot. I suppose Epilogue would have been better for the ending; unless it is a teaser for an addition to the current story. Great stuff; I want more.

RS

Who is Sonia?

I read this story recently. Did you resubmit it, and why??

For a while I enjoyed the highly descriptive, involved, erotic writing. After page 3 my enjoyment waned and the story simply became monotonous and dragged on. By the end of page 4, I had enough. 3 stars. It's not that I couldn't and didn't enjoy the storyline, I just didn't enjoy the writing.