All Comments on '750 Heartbeats'

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lc69hunterlc69hunterover 5 years ago

wow, not what I expected

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Well that was different

I shouldn't have read it, given that it was posted in erotic horror. Not a horror kinda guy. But 750 words goes by quickly. I figured she was going to eat him. Then I thought about it. She DID eat him. That's why he's transparent. I guess that was clever. But it reminds me of all horror stories. NEVER open the door. NEVER go down into the basement. Why would he follow a ghost up the stairs? But again - not a horror guy. I gave it 3 stars.

LoquiSordidaAdMeLoquiSordidaAdMeover 5 years ago
Well done ghost story

It probably could have used a bit more backstory and misdirection, but it worked well enough within the 750 word limit. I'm not quite clear on how a canine mouth can "suck" but pups nurse, so I suppose it must be possible

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

I was generous - close call but I gave it three stars.

oldpantythiefoldpantythief5 months ago

I'm thinking I would be temped to pass on putting my dick in a wolfs mouth, lots of sharp teeth. My dick isn't huge but I'm very attached to it.

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I'm sorry I finished and submitted the latest Spark story so close to the Geek Pride deadline that it was delayed and missed the 25th. However, it is now published. I hope those who have been enjoying the series continue to do so with this latest offering. *~*~*~*~* I keep fo...