All Comments on 'Bad Vibe'

Nice Job, don't stop

but in the library the thought still works. TK U MLJ LV NV

It's not my usual preference, as I don't care for incest and I can see that is clearly where this story is going. Also, I have a strong preference for sex stories having actual sex, and not the prevention thereof. Nonetheless, it was an enjoyable read. I liked your main characters, Maude and Craig, but I was less comfortable with Amy. That, of course, relates to my bias against incest stories. I had some problems with your punctuation, missing words, and spelling (typos, probably) in the first half. Most of those were cleaned up in the second half. I was prepared to poke a big hole in your story regarding confiscation of the camera's memory card solving the photo problem, but you cleared that issue up in a conclusive manner.

If it seems like I'm trashing the story, that is not my intent. The main takeaway here is that you overcame my biases and wrote I story I enjoyed even though it contained elements I usually try to avoid. I liked Craig doing the right thing and getting away with it. Even though it goes against my preferences, I like that Craig and Maude did not have sex after what she went through. Most authors would have taken the easy way out and had her screwing him to show her appreciation, but that would have been totally unrealistic. I liked that you had a credible explanation for her behavior, both before and after the incident. The story did not rely on impossible leaps in logic, and that is what I look for most in the stories I read. The only real stretch was Maude's sister also being a DA, but that was minor and did not affect my enjoyment. Nice work.

What to think! Wish there was a chapter 2 to clarify.

A pretty clean story so far, just a kidnapped naked woman that had been drugged and tortured into submission and raped repeatedly; a shy, levelheaded high school athlete and a closet incestuous exhibitionist MILF, what's not to like? Well, a little more horror over the rape, shame and disgust with herself by the librarian would do nicely along with her struggles to suppress her lust from having her body lusted over. A little more ogling and struggling to suppress his lust would be appropriate too. Hope you have fully developed same in the subsequent chapters. Good beginning, though, really enjoyed it.

DHL

I like character development and logical plot construction. So far this storymeets these conditions. As a romantic and an avid reader of incestuous love stories, especially between mother and son, I do not care that much about the ridiiculous sexual antics between the couple. I appreciate romance, intimacy, and emotional, psychological and sensual sexual activity between lovers. Finally, I like the trust that exists between lovers. So far you have proven that you can write and know how to use the English language.