by LostBaby
This story, for its brevity, is complex yet is very well organized. The sexual tension is quickly and thoroughly developed, and the climax of the story leaves the reader feeling as satisfied and pleased as the characters.<P>
I sincerely hope that you have the time and ability to write more, and quickly, for I would love frequent indulgences of such wonderfully crafted stories -- whether erotic or not!<P>
Thanks!<BR>
-Lep-
Hot hot story. I love the part where he made you lean against the wall. Please write more.
You lost me when you inserted the third character. From where did "she" come? Who was she? Was she a ghost, a roommate, a stranger he brought in as a surprise, a figment of a sudden onset psychotic episode or just a person you wanted to develop and forgot about in the haste to create a story? The third person who appeared from nowhere, then just as suddenly disappeared like a wraith which goes bump in the night, seriously flawed an otherwise good narrative.
I like the interaction of the couple, how he was in control, but stayed gentle. Its nice to read an anal story where the man wants to please the woman and not just himself.
Super hot! I think many women have this same fantasy..and the braver ones make it a reality.
Got me so hard, the tension was great and the final pounding left us wondering ,will it lead to more? Very sexy writing please write more.
Your story had such a sense of realism. I could imagine this actually happening and not just some fantasy. You should write more often. You are very talentd.
Im rubbing my wet clit. This story is making me so wet. Mmm my ass is in the air. Someone go deep in me...