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All Comments on 'A Beautiful Fall Afternoon'

by luvs2cuddle

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Tenses

You switch back and forth between present and past tense. Try to be consistent.

luvs2cuddleluvs2cuddlealmost 8 years agoAuthor
Thank you

Your comment is much appreciated. This is a story I started awhile back and just recently finished. That is probably why the switching is so bad. I do apologize and thank you for stopping by to read.

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