All Comments on 'A Big Surprise'

Have your story reviewed by an editor to catch the obvious mistakes like using "hear" for "hair". They are so very distracting for the reader! The story itself is very good with the older neighbor and the hot teenage cheerleader! Only the errors prevented me from giving it a 100.

wish that could happen to me, i have stroked to this story so many times in my office....and in my garage, hoping the neighbor across the street would do the same to me....i would cum all over her...or just jack off for her to see. hot

i came when they came... :D

More please.