All Comments on 'A Birthday Present'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Tease!

All fluff, no substance. Too many loose ends. This story didn't end, so much as it just stopped. The grammar and mechanics were very good, but a story should never create more questions than it answers, unless the last line is: "To Be Continued".

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