All Comments on 'A Birthday Surprise'

Needed a LOT more depth and action. It was a good start, but really could have been fleshed out to a full event and not a brief surmise.

Great story line which can really be added to. Surprise and exciting endind with a big door being opened to much more between all parties. More please!

But this is far to short.

I usually want more background and character development, but this gave enough that I knew who the people were and the premise was simple enough that we didn't need to know more about them.

I enjoyed it. And yes, definitely an opening for more!

What an awesome birthday present. I got one birthday gift like that from my ex boss and a woman I’d had the hots for several years. When I was 18 in the Navy I use to go to a strip club. One dancer who went by Robin Bird was so sexy. She moved away a couple of years later. About 8 years later I went by the club (I worked part time for the club then) and there was Robin Bird. She needed extra money so she came back for a weekend. So my birthday came around a month later and my boss at my other job at an adult bookstore rented a hotel room for me. Robin came over and she and I started to have sex. After about 30 minutes she said to me “Let me know when you’re going to cum” I knew she was married so I thought she didn’t want me to cum in her. So I got close and I tell her I was going to cum and she grinds down hard and as I started to cum she loudly said “HAPPY BIRTHDAY” as I filled her up. Damn it was soooo HOT!

Short, sweet, and nicely written.