All Comments on 'A Blast from The Past'

Suitable for a woman's weekly!

Incomplete, but nice. Details about why he believed his wife had replaced him in bed and how he became convinced otherwise are missing. A hint, whenever you think "it goes without saying" stop and say it, as it probably needs to be said.

Took you too long to introduce who I was. Then you got mixed which one was I as I had ordered fish not steak.

Little things make reading harder work than should be.

Best to stick with 3rd person POV. Saves having to remember your I's

Was a nice little diddle but just barely a 4*, due to so many typo's that even a once over read thru would have spotted and corrected - lazy. Also another major issue is I got lost many times in the transitions between WHO was talking when?

There you are with all four of them for the first time and the lines are bouncing all over the place between them - I could not follow who was saying what. Sometimes due to the comments within the sentence I could deduce who said what but not always.

Just a little clean up would have made it a very good story, a little more info would let me learn more about 'down-under', a place I've only been once via US Navy, but is on my bucket-list to thoroughly investigate, someday.

I like the story a lot. AAA+++

JASON BEING HER FATHER AND THE INTRO OF HER MOTHER WITH JASON IS SICKENING.....JUST DOES NOT GEL.....NO GRAND STORY HERE

1*star!! The introduction of Ben was so poorly written then he is all over the daughter, set up by Jason!!

Jason being her father just spoilt the storyline

funny and, oddly enough, plausible story given where it's situated.

Funny parts and a good story

I love good fiction. The fantasy about solar and wind power was especially funny.

Thanks!