by Nemasis Enforcer
...is really going to hit the fan, NOW! (for BOTH of them)
That was an awsome stoy and all of them were awsome but there should be more stories i mean how will Dawm, Stacy, Kim, and Trish feel about Lee only going to be with April. You should how another chapter where they fight over Lee and tragic things happen.
I am not just a porno junkie(LOL well...), I also like to read A LOT! I'm glad your story isn't all sex, it's got a readability to it that makes it also a great book!
I fell in love with my neice, and she with me twenty odd years ago, she was half my age, we lived together for fifteen of those years and were very happy. Until she got pregnant and I asked her to get an abortion. She left for America a few weeks later. What a spineless arsehole I was.
I didn't even ask her what she wanted.I will regret that decision for the rest of my days.
Really nice on taking time with their union. Your description is rich and pretty good. If you could just nix the run-on sentences and describe Lee's/April's orgasm more in detail (what they both felt), this would be truly complete. Still very hot!
It was goo, but boy it really drug out for me, had a hard time pushing through. (Pardon the pun;)
Your efforts in the first seven chapters were appreciated, but this one had many dozen typos,homologs and just plain errors. The overused and misplaced commas force the reader to pause and guess your intentions. Completely broke the flow of the tale.
Your penchance for stringing three or four compound sentences into one five line conglomeration is not your friend.