by Taxesdaddy13
Hot story concept but difficult to stay engaged with all the typos and mistakes. It felt like you wrote this while playing with yourself and then immediately posted it. Keep writing, but give it a once-over before you post it.
MUITO BOA A HISTORIA...SO COM UMA RESSALVA...A MÃE OU O FILHO DEVERIAM SABER O NUMERO DO TELEFONE QUE ELES ESTAVAM LIGANDO.QUAL MÃE OU QUAL FILHO NÃO SABE O NUMERO DO CELULAR UM DO OUTRO.NO MAIS UMA HISTORIA BEM EXCITANTE.
Nice story but kind of disappointed by how abruptly it ended. Feels like you need to work on this one a bit more. Still good job.
Dislike your char descriptions, don't need to know their weight or cup size. Very boring, dehumanizing, and instant turn-off
Good story concept but I think English isn't your native language. If you are an English speaking person I would ask how did you graduate from high school. Your grammar and spelling is atrocious, forget about sentence structure.
Nice story but I felt like the reveal should have occurred much sooner, like 1/2 way thru the story.
I hope this is my Cousin Adam in Texas with his mother Mary. If so, you lucky SOB!
I loved your story, to much nitpicking. I look past the errors its just fantasy or is it
It was exciting, but I do feel like we could have used at least one scene where they fucked and knew about it being incest. Like he could have came in to her in the dark with her legs folded back and she could have turned a lamp next to the bed on right as he was calling her mommy and cumming.
This story makes me think of my mother when I was young. She was so beautiful and sexy with big firm tits and an ass to die for. I wish I had been more mature at the time I wanted to fuck her so bad. Thanks for the story so want to hear the end of it. It makes me think of my mom so much !
I think this was great story but I felt cheated out of another great part of it when you put the story on fast-forward.
if my wife ever did this kind of this i would take my Glock and empty it into her
Great story. But you rally rushed the ending.they need to slow down and love each other.
I like how the story progressed. They meet online. Make their arrangements to meet. And when they come face to face for that very first time. No one got crazy. They ended up together as it should be.
It too would like to have seen mom wanting a baby from her man.