by Harry Twist
You start off by saying "I qualify as one of those poor unfortunate victims, but I cannot identify with the misfortune I keep hearing about.", meaning you were raised in a single parent home. You then proceed to tell us you are 20 years old and your parents split up over three years ago. This would make you 16 or 17 when it happened. This means you weren't raised in a single parent home. You spent most of your life in a normal household with two parents.
Since you can't even get your introduction right, and what I presume to be the basis for the entire story, I didn't bother reading after the second paragraph.
This had a good title and summary. Unfortunately, I think it could have been much better.
WE NEED MORE DETAILS AND A LONGER STORY, THIS WAS A LITTLE SHORT. MAYBE ANOTHER PAGE COULD GET IT IN HIGH GEAR. ALL IN ALL A GOOD READ.................LAROC OF AGES
I was helping my son set up his tent in our forest of trees in our back yard with his girlfriends. Just as we got in set up it started to rain in buckets and the six of us rushed into the tent. We all had gotten drenched and the four girls were out of there clothes in no time drying each other off. They told us to get out of our wet clothes and soon my son and I were naked and the four girls were drying us off also. two of the girls were on their knees one sucking my cunt and the other engulfing my sons cock. By the end of that week-end my son had dropped enough loads in our fertile hairy cunts that we all missed our next period
Wow I like the way you expressed "the gateway to glory" and "the trumpet sounded",nothing like a little religion during sex.LOL keep up the good writing and don't forget to just plain keep it up.LOL
Looking forward to part 2,i know i used to love seeing my Mother in the tub,she was great.