All Comments on 'A First Time for Both'

Lots of typos and poor writing. Also, if she's trans she wouldn't use the men's locker room. And you refer to her as actively male at one point. All around really rough.

i like the story very much but it needs a little bit of work to make it to the top, keep going.

I urge you to find a good editor. You also desperately need to work on dialogue & presenting a cleanlydetailed narrative. This was aekwardly written & difficult to follow.

Please, find a good editor. This was pretty bad imo. Story wise, it had potential but it needs a LOT of work.