A Friend in Need Ch. 01

Many of these stories that claim to be about cheating are actually about stupidity.

Goddamn, can't believe you never did a part 2

Addendum

The real bad promise is that this is 8 years late for Chapter2.

This story’s worst fault (IMHO) is that the actual characters rarely (if any) are trusted to actually talk with each other! Instead, Hubby tells us (in his own words) what Sweetie and Matthew say to each other! Next problem is that the narration is casual about what happened in the more distant past and what was more recent. Also, it seems unclear whether the main characters live very close by or much more distantly (made current connection on social media, but are currently meeting in person!)

Finally, Hubby ignores what are very obvious ‘sexual predator’ tactics, but does not alert Sweetie to that possibility!

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Ezrollin. I think you missed my point. ie; She said to him, "Unless you penis shrunk since the last time we met." I thought they had been boyfriends when she was ten and just held hands. Also. She had a one time fling with a friend of his. Well what led to it? you don't just go up to a woman and ask. Wanna fuck? even if she's drunk. Those are little things I notice when somebody is just trying to extend a story to fill in a whole page. She went to his house after work. And his children were still at school? Wouldn't he have picked out a better place than at home? Why throw stuff in there that are not going to have anything with the story? Don't get me wrong. I did like the story. But it could have been a lot better if he had read it and made some changes before printing it. Another thing. Why leave a story started? With as many stories as are submitted every day, What are the odds that either you and I will run across the ending to this story? Tell your story. Keep it simple. but finish it. Thank you for reading.

I have to disagree with Widowedidiot, I like a slow lead-in as long as it isn't too long or repetitious. No build-up to the final act is like having sex without foreplay. If I find a story interesting enough to read it through, and many I don't, I give it a four... I read this one through.

I gave it a 1 it was basically a fairly good story, But!! the first thing you learn in writing is that you don't give out so much discription on what's going on, Kiss. my college professor always stressed that. (Keep it simple stupid) anyway, you rambled on but offered very little content, and then you end page 2 with what? Well, to your story, you and your wife have to be pretty dense not to pick up on where he was leading her, He wouldn't send her a picture of his cock because he knew she would get curious and do his bidding. I think that she did fuck him, but knowing how you would react, she probably thought it best not to tell you, I'm not going to read the rest of your chapters because she is going to fuck him over and over and tell you what you want to hear, but that. and you're probably going to go through a whole page just to tell us that the next meeting they just made out. he probably has a monster cock, but she wont say because she knows you already. anyway it's probably going to take you three or four chapters to finally tell us what happened and I'm not going to sit and go through that. good luck next time.

you shouldn't have given away the second part. There is no longer the tension and mystery to entice one's curiosity.

Not sure I want to pursue this story or try a different one.

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Of course her husband is an ass for being so upset over next to nothing especially since she actually told him what happened. Certainly she is an extremely rare woman since wives never tell unless the think either the husband will approve or else he will not strongly disapprove and get angry and upset.

If you make part 2 or Ch 2 do not make the husband a wimp on the count that she basically cheated. no intercourse but the rest is still disrespect. Either the marriage is solid and she wants to keep her family intact and stay an honest wife or no. but if you choose to make her a continued cheat then kick her to the curb losing her children.. no need having that pictured either.