All Comments on 'A Frustrated Wife Ch. 03'

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KisstheGirlKisstheGirlalmost 10 years ago

While I don't generally condone adultery, this is simply fantastic! One piece of constructive criticism I can give you, is don't repeat their names so much. We know who they are, but using their name every other word distracts from what's going on in the story. I can see you using the names once every paragraph, or every other one, but c'mon man ( or woman as the case my be ) I think you're brilliant, it's just that one thing that irks me. Other than that, keep up the good work!

liz33ndliz33ndalmost 7 years ago

this is so erotic, cant wait until all three get together with the hubby. alex will be so impressed his wife is having erotic sex with two adult movie stars.

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