All Comments on 'A Game of Stamina'

not bad but the whole monstrous cock thing is played out.. however... would like to see more chapters unfold...

great story, quite entertaining, and the ending statement was a perfect finish.

One of the hotter stories that I've read here in a long time. Nice work

what d fuck is is wrong with the parents?? let them join urgently - cant wait till the kids fuck their mom & dad

This story should have been a home run, but like another comment said, "The spelling and grammar made me lose interest".

The concept of the story and the storyline were perfect, but I got the impression that you wrote it and didn't even reread it (or have someone else proof-read it) due to the grammar and spelling errors.

I'm lousy at proof-reading my own stories so I have several close friends that do it for me, and we STILL miss a few here and there... but there were too many in this story.

My suggestion would be to rewrite it, correcting the errors, and repost.

It's a definite contendor (spelling?) for the top list!

Incredible fucking story--the best I've ever read. it was a literal blast lol Errors? Only a few but the idiots below must be so fucking jealous! don't stop writing, keep 'em coming!!!!

Damn this story had my dick throbbin, to fuck two hot sisters, and even get caught by mom and dad and continue to fuck them, mmmm had me cummimg hard. My dick is still hard.

I was thinking all along that I would say that this was the hottest story I'd ever read... until the last 5 paragraphs, where the whole fantasy was ruined. Such a downer ending to a great story.

just not erotic. Too wham, bam.

big bro bang his two little sisters in every positions known to man and cum all over them, inside and out! HOT!

Probably my favorite story on this site. A few grammatical errors, and the subtext is a little shallow, but the ending totally came out of left field and had me in stitches.

This is the best story vie ever read, no joke. I've been reading this site for years, and damn, this makes me wish I had a brother

Instead of abortion he should have thought about them full of his babies.

I agree with Kitten, and now that "the cat is out of the bag" they are bound to get together again. =)

I agree with Kitten, He mite say dad you may want to keep mom happy i have GAMES OF STAMINA

Loved that bit.

The rest played out like a very poorly scripted porno. Full of stupid money shots and clichés. You know, the type of porno you start watching, then skip over to look for something better? Yeah, that's the bulk of this story. Which is a shame, because the premise is very exciting, and could have been very, very hot, if the author tried to make it a little more plausible. We're READING a story here NOT watching it. Money shots are boring when you're reading them. And I've personally fucked enough women to know that nothing beats blowing in a nice tight hole, instead of pulling out half way through your cumshot, and jacking off all over the place. Make the guy an asshole and he becomes unlike-able. Because that's what we're reading.

The ending was a little awkward with the folks turning up and the kids attitude about that. It didn't work except for the last line which was pretty good.

The claim of his "monster" cock being halfway inserted before encountering her hymen in truth, means his monster is no more than 1" long. The hymen is located IMMEDIATELY past the vaginal sphincter about 1/2" inch from the mouth of the vagina. ANY of you writers who talk of de-flowering a virgin should do the RESEARCH first before making fantastic claims of hymen location. Maybe on an alien planet their maidenhoods are located 4-5" inside the vaginal canal, but not your ordinary run of the mill human female. As soon as this incredible impossibility of a hymen 5" deep in a vagina was mentioned, I quit reading and voted a 1 for wildly inaccurate data, then posted this comment. Try again.

better or for worst (worse)

to-die-for (to die for)

hormones was (were)

sweatpants as (-for) her pajamas

sense of reliefs (relief)

cocks like miner (mine)

I can hold it in as long as I (-can). (want) (AS ORIGINALLY WRITTEN THIS SENTENCE HAS NO MEANING!!!!)

abs (-muscles)

buck-naked (buck naked)

Beauty Pageant for Greatest Ass (beauty pageant greatest ass)

take turn (take turns)

unbreakable cock (WTF!!!!)

took intake (of) breath

smell of sweats (sweat)

anything but the image of Veronica's almost feeble existence (MEANINGLESS!!!!)

jumble titties (jumbo)

hot breaths (breath)

her clits (clit) (SHE ONLY HAS ONE!!!!)

between her cleavages (cleavage)

aureole (areola)

grinded (ground)

made this anticipation even worst (worse)

spread my leg (legs)

letting her hot breath making it even tougher (make)

two-third (thirds)

my entire discipline (POORLY WORDED!!!!)

Lay on your back (Lie)

Popsicle (popsicle)

like (-a) (the) little sex kitten you are

Then she bend over (bent)

bask in that sight (AWFUL CHOICE OF WORDS)

pussylips (pussy lips)

she did a little booty-shake that only black girls can do (CONTRADICTORY STATEMENT)(SHE DID IT AND SHE’S WHITE)

ripple of lust in my spine (WTF!!!!)

breaking in sweats (out) ()

credence of her pussy (WRONG CHOICE OF WORDS)

wet not just from me but from herself (CLUMSY!!!!)

liftedd (lifted)

gripping my member in a very warm padlock (UNCOMMUNICATIVE)

into her dead-end (MEANINGLESS!!!!)

everyday (every day)

slammed into her home (UNCOMMUNICATIVE)

felt all (the) pressure disappeared (disappear)

like a whore she was (the)

her very beauty (CLUMSY)

would have ravage her (ravaged)

muscularly tight (UNCLEAR IMAGE!!!!)

Watching her ass getting reamed (cunt) (CONFUSING AND CONTRADICTORY!!!!)

felt another quart squirted (squirt)

licked my entire semen (AWKWARD!!!!)

little's sister pelvis (little sister’s)

Wonderland (wonderland)

primeval strokes (UNCLEAR IMAGE!!!!)

must have saw (seen)

(-was) stretched her pussylips

golf ball hole (POORLY EXPRESSED!!!!)

mounted on top her (ILL CHOSEN WORDS!!!!)

ungraceful command (INEPTLY WRITTEN!!!!)

hammered into (her) shithole

home any minutes (minute)

felt her rectum break (UNCLEAR!!!!)

felt my balls touched her ass (touch)

watched her furiously fucked herself (fuck)

bedspread (and) sheet

thank-you (thank you)

Intentionally having no message to fuck with their grammar nazi

Actually spellchecking is pretty easy, hell this text window even does it, besides there are tons of free sites on the web that you can use to check your stuff, or just download a free writing program to use.

Anyway, the story was fucking awesome!! As for the ending, screw dad beating anyone, they're all over 18! Heh. ...anyway the misspelled shit didn't bother me much, a lot of fucked up grammar, missing words, extra letters and such was annoying though. Oh, the hymen isn't in the middle of her fucking vagina!! Argh!

Otherwise awesome! Maybe another chapter, they move out and get their own place, the sisters bring over a couple of virgin cousins and/or friends for them and their brother to 'help' out, hehe.

Thanks for the story!!

I thought another subplot was about to start: I wondered whether the dad would reveal that he had his own little harem going. IE: that he and his older daughter had a history of incest and that now the younger daughter was coming of age he would start tapping her too. Naturally, mom and brother would have been in the dark in this activity.

It started out good. But you really need to proofread before you post. He was fucking her pussy taking her virginity then all of a sudden he's in her ass????? Come on,you can do better.

Very furiously hot story. Grammar mistakes yes, but excused.

Very cliched. Cringed heavily unnecessary misandry within the first few sentences. Couldn't read all the way through.

Untagged anal :(