All Comments on 'A Game of Surrogate Wife'

Come on guys please give me some feedback

The negative:

This story needs an editor. The paragraphs are too long; there are many run-on sentences; there are a number of obvious spelling errors.

The Positive:

The story is hot. The couple love and trust each other. The wife trusts her friend to not take things too far. Given that criteria, the wife pleases her life-long friend and shows herself a good time without endangering her marriage. It was just a good story, and the section seen through the wife's eyes was erotic indeed.

I don't know how I missed this when posted. This is a hot story that addresses the questions that would be in the mind of a husband who likes the thought of his wife being wanted by other men, but isn't sure how far he wants it to go. He obviously isn't a wimp. He just thinks his wife is hot and wants other men to feel the same. Good story.

Great story, but the grammer errors are distracting.

As I read your stories in order of submission, I notice that your grammer is improving.

Keep up the good work.

Thanks.

I can't wait to read part 2.

This is one of my favorites!

Super! Super story! I very liked it! The story presented me a whole night of pleasure thoughts ;)

Please write more!

I gather that the story was well written, but I gave up when I started reading about the role playing. I have been married for almost 40 years and I have never role played. WE have dozens of friends and they have never felt it necessry to role play.It's only in Literotica that role playing seems to be the sterotpical ploy in so many stories. Grow up and write like an adult,

the Ct Yankee

Why get married to a slut, you would be much better off just paying a prostitute and getting better sex. At least you know what your getting with a prostitute, a slut wife is disaster waiting to happen. I don't find stories like this the least bit erotic, just disgusting.

I'd love to experience something like this with my own wife!

keep writing ignore the faggots who cant write constructive criticism next time make sure she gets fucked.

I can understand the haters. Unfortunately for them their marriages never involved love and sexuality to any much degree, and they wouldn't understand the heightened pleasure that love can absorb. For them it's all been about infidelity and pain. That's a world away from this, but they'll never get it. Fantastically written story from someone with a finger on the pulse of sensuality..Réage, Nïn et al...Mancelt.

What a wonderful story. I hope it was real. I feel bad for anyone who has never roleplayed with their spouse. Part fo the fun of life is the games we play. If you read this story you must have some interest in this topic, so give a very good writer her due.

Would I want my wife to do everything she did? YES, YES, a hundred times, YES. It would not cost me anything. It would just be fun. Her pussy would still work for me, and my cock for her.

Please do write more.

Thats all you write, my wife fucked this guy, my wife sucked that guy, then fucked him, than my wife really turned me on and fucked them both. First of all your bi, second get a life, change it up. If you really do this all your times haven't been great, tell a different tale, about her asshole boyfriend, someone who was fucking her who pissed you off, made you jealous, insercure. Thats real, this pie in the sky bullshit isn't.

One of my all time favorite Literotica stories. Incredible sensual and totally believable. Thanks!

Oh yes a great way to have the best of both worlds, very well thought out..

real great story. love slow build seduction with wife storiesth wife stories

I unearthed a battered copy of this story this morning, reread it and reminded myself just how hot it was. Has to be nine years since I printed a personal copy off (it's dated October 2003 here, but I'm sure I read it earlier; was it posted on one of the other sites earlier?). And to discover there's a second chapter is a real joy.

That story was sexy without being crude. Poor husband! Didn't know what to believe! Did they or didn't they? And not really wanting them to but kind of turned on thinking that perhaps they did.

.. I assume the Husband gets to mess around with his friend's next girlfriend, and let his wife think he slept with her? Oh wait, that's right, it is only ok if the wife messes around....

Real eroticism... a Myth!

This is in serious need of editing. Would have been pretty good otherwise.

Enjoyed your story. Thanks.

cantbuymy never has a positive comment. He / she/ it's comments should be 110% ignored. It has no submissions so it obviously can't write....just degrade those who try.

Does it exist? I seem to recall it as a bad bad taste? Was it a pedophile?

I like the premise and also the shift of POV from wife to husband.

On to Ch. 2.

This story has been both thrilling and devastating, exactly for the same reasons that the legitimate husband in this story.

Not matter I like men hitting and even trying to get a sneak grope of my wife's delicious body, a completely different issue is when you encourage and witness it. And when she, just for playful mood trows control to the wind and strays way beyond the line having full orgasms her and the bull, just takes step that cannot be walked back.

Furthermore, having Tom being someone that can definitely trace the couple back home, it is simply assured that, not matter what happens at chapter 2 (which I am reluctant to sample), upon returning home it will be Him who will becoming number one. As simple as dropping by when in need a piece of gourmet-cut ass, or merely needing his rocks emptied by just anyone.

Former hubby WILL arrive home at some future time, and if he is lucky he will still have a place there, not to think to be able to still get a decent share of her; rather, the most probable scenery is that in these vacations he lost his wife, his kids, his home and his life.

Sorry, I guess that I am changing my feelings.

I really enjoyed this well put together story. The eroticism slowly builds up. Thank you for a fun story.

Especially husbands or wives. Is this a British cultural artifact? Where was this habit learned.

Otherwise the story was fine.

Care for it or any cuck junk you should let people know up front.

I wouldn't be him and I wouldn't keep her.

superhot story, the tease was tremendous and probably more than I could stand. It bordered on cuckiness, but was really sexy. Hubby had to have the best orgasm of his life the next day.

Loved this

Hated this.

The husband isn't a man, just a simp beta bitch (like so many on here)