All Comments on 'A Ghost's Story for Halloween'

Fun story. I liked the ending.

I thought your concept was clever, and the story was fun to read, though a good editor could really help you improve your writing.

I loved this story. The concept I found to be clever and the writing was fantastic. Expand on this and I think you will have a top novel.

You seem to have knowledge of the occult.

What you have written suggests some of my experience.

First the constructive criticism; work on the 'saving the marriage' bit; it needs more time & more body language from both of them in the conversation, I just read it as sarcasm the first time and it would be better if it were more clear that it really helped.

Hot, well written and I thought the ending made the whole thing more intimate.

Poe would have loved the twist ;-) Excellent job

You have an excellent story if you stop at the end of the first page where she says she doesn't have any money. Or you could continue and skip to the death twist at the end. The hot top scene just distracts from an excellent tale, and I don't see the value it contributes, It feels like unnecessary padding.

Your explanation is as good as any other.

Didn't see that ending coming

Thanks