All Comments on 'A Gift from Tomorrow Ch. 01'
by TurtleHermit
- 19 Comments
Anonymousabout 3 years agoCertainly an interesting premise for a story! Two things:
1. Don't use an ampersand (&) instead of the word "and."
2. "Lushous" is not a word. It's spelt "luscious."
CJMcCormickabout 3 years agoI really enjoyed this first chapter and I'm looking forward to more!
Anonymousabout 3 years agoThis setup has fantastic potential. My only real concern is that this’ll just be nothing more than setups for sex. If that’s all you’re going for, then cool. It just feels like you intentionally left room for stuff like Sarah developing more of a personality or learning to enjoy other things in life. I could be wrong. Either way, looking forward to seeing where you’ll take this
dkindigabout 3 years agoLike the premise and the initial setup, agree with the previous comment, hoping for more in the way of Sarah growing as a sentient being as well as the sexual side. Looking forward to the next part!
dkindigabout 3 years agoSorry, forgot to add this in my previous comment: Also looking forward to your development of the back story in terms of Sarah's origin.
grapheneabout 3 years agoGreat setup so far!
I'm looking forward to a continuation.
Hopefully there will be more development on the characters, abilities and their relationship.
Anonymousabout 3 years ago'bout gave me a heart attack with Turtle Creek Lane in Alpharetta/Milton. Just a ways down the road!
Anonymousover 2 years agoI would definitely like to see where you'd go with this story, I hope there will be as much revealing the mystery around her as much as hot sex!
can't wait, please post more chapters as soon as posible!
bumblegrumover 2 years agoA well developed story with great potential for further exploration. I look forward to more stories about Chris and Sarah. Many thanks; five stars today, more if they were available.
tv5400almost 2 years agoI love it, especially the vivid descriptions of shapeshifting in the beginning. Looking forward to the next chapter!
