All Comments on 'A Girl on the Bus Pt. 06'

Anymore parts? This is a very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing.

And it took a while to do the job once they had arrived at their destination.

These things shouldn't be rushed. They should be savoured.

It was lovely.

Lue

Thank you for a delicious little tale of chance and lust. Loved it.

Any more parts? Maybe, maybe not. Delilah is a very private woman, and might not like too much attention. We'll see :).

Sublime writing, scarcely matched in this venue. This is a fantasy that many of us have had, meeting someone and coming together in a magical way, with no friction or hitches in the flow.

This could be in a magazine, it's that good. Do you write professionally? If not, maybe you should try. If you do, thanks for this gift!

R.

Wonderful series

No, I'm not a professional writer; just lucky I can turn a phrase or two. Plus a vivid imagination and an eye for women in the street and on the commute. The woman who inspired this story really did have a low voice with an accent and always wore beautiful clothes. A Jenny Swing Skirt is the name of the cut Delilah wears in the earlier chapters, according to my search engine.

This story has a life all its own... it rolls like a river. Really enjoying your writing again.

How lucky we are to have you EB - you write so wonderfully well - such calm, measured and well thought out choice of words, such an eye for the tiniest detail which adds such depth. Thank you

Perhaps somewhere we will learn the significance of this. But until then I remain curious. Love the series.

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I read through Girl on a Bus. I loved how you built rhythms and repetition into the prose, particularly the dialogue. And it’s great to see stories that have oblique elements, a certain amount of Impressionism, rather than rote and dry scenes that read like furniture assembly instructions.

Excellent story, great imagery makes it seem like we are there.

Thanks!

So beautiful, so much worth waiting for, such kindness and passion - what a great combination!

Your women, so far, Bec, Ruby, Delilah, are strong.

Somewhat like a passive aggressive Mistress, if that makes sense ;)

I like the way they baby their man, a touch of humiliation, without being mean.

I really liked the build up, but for some reason I nearly always find the act a bit of an anti-climax. A bit like the journey being better than the destination. However, I love the way you write.