All Comments on 'A Girl on the Bus'

Good memories. Thanks for the reminder!!

So gentle - lovely, EB, thanks

Nicely written -- the visual description, the repetition. Just the right degree of lust. Very light. Everything rings true. I can easily imagine seeing this, like a short movie.

The imagery is gorgeous and the writing is provoking in all the right ways. A lovely read.

Nice! I feel as if I have just watched a short movie - and now I am wondering what might happen tomorrow morning.

Five stars. I feel like a passenger on the bus, very nice.

Delightful story! Too bad the bus didn't lurch causing her to fall unto his lap.

Well described, EB. I was right there with you. Could even smell the bus.

Ships that pass in the night, maybe is all it will be, but talking is a gentle start.

For such few words, it's very descriptive and a sweet encounter that could someday develop into more. Very well done.

5I

this is superb writing. Very enjoyable.

Lovely writing, EB. Indeed I was seated across the aisle, watching the exchange intently. I hope it leads somewhere, but if not the vignette is concise, precise.

I enjoyed your story, very much! So keen an eye for the tiniest eye for details. I would never have thought of counting her pulse in the manner you have described. Excellent.

Love the way you capture the many possibilities of an encounter - from lots of connection to absolutely nothing. Judging by the list of sequels I am hoping it is not the latter....

Loving it 💋

You really captured the scene, and in so few words. Excellent!

Daydreaming & desire.

'Red' is an important color in your writings, so are ponytails.

Your imagination & craftsmanship touch all of my senses. Thank you. xox

I love how you can paint such a vivid picture with so few words. A wonderful story and an inspiration to other writers, for sure!!