All Comments on 'A Great Day'

Enjoyable short story. Thanks!

Do you ever write an average story? No! Always great reading. I see some comments from Annoymous with JPB tagged at their end. Hoping someone isn’t doing you wrong

A nice quick piece where the stars align perfectly.

Short and sweet, 4 stars!

needs to be finished

Not a bad start to a story, just too short and kind of unfinished.

Seems incomplete.

4 Stars as the wife should have kept her job. . But I would have made sure that her lover's wife knew about it also.

Neat little tale. Says all that needs be said.

After The first 10 or so of your story list I only have one question why don’t you ever finish the story

Quick short story bloody great 👍

Too bad the boss fired Terri... that will probably mean Rob will have to pay her more alimony.

I liked the fact that she and her lover got fired. I wish there would have been more destruction for both of them, like jail time. Like being sued by the company they worked for for lying. I don't want to give up on this author yet until I read a few more stories. I felt it should be longer, but the author did say it was a Flash story, so I can't complain on how long it was.

Liked it, but site would not let me vote. Also, very well-written. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Short and Sweet

What of the description didn't you people understand? It says: "A flash story about cheating and consequences." A flash story, also known as flash fiction, "is a fictional work of extreme brevity that still offers character and plot development." - Wikipedia

So there is no need to finish the damn story. Nor is it too short.

Forgot the bad day part - where he finds out that he has a couple of diseases that she got from the scumbag...

Too short. Ftds.

Good story.. BUT

FTDS!!

Good story, but needs more. It’s a good story to be continued.

Short and sweet. What more is there to say?

desecration- Your comment can be taken, one of two ways. If you are insinuating that she was justified in cheating, because he was working hard to make a life for them, I disagree. Go around and ask 20 to 30 something single women, how many guys are out there, marriage material, who have a good job, and a work ethic? Not too many.

If you insinuate she was sleeping with the boss for more money, that is also a myth, in today’s world. HR departments closely control the pay scales, and amount of raises an individual can get. Sleeping with the boss, is usually something women do because they are enamored with his power, and personal wealth. Maybe he spends HIS money on her. Maybe she thinks, she could “ trade up”. If he recommends her for a promotion, it will be more work, and responsibility. If she is unqualified, it will weigh the company, and her boss down. A lot of companies have morals policies in place. I will guarantee you, they could care less about who is screwing who. It’s all about protecting themselves, when it comes to light. It also gives them a way to remove anyone who gets promoted, or keeps their job due to their work between the sheets. Usually, these people are a drag on morale, and do not contribute like the rest of the staff. If the boss was serious about continuing their relationship, the first move would be to get them out of the company, or at least his department. That, is reality.

I liked it. But I agree, a part two would be good. 5 stars.

Brief

Well good first chapter, but where's the rest of the story?

Good, quick story. Thanks for your writing.

Bing bang boom! 5 stars

Hey tell people if they don't like your ending WRITE ONE!

Woah, what happened to the ending, it didn’t have one.

Your stories are good but need better endings, not left hanging

Rushed but a good start for a story.

Enjoyable short read, concise and to the point , no history and what happened next scenario, a simple actions and consequences story: just enough for Anonymous, who cannot differentiate between FICTION and FACTUAL, to have his/her usual gripe

not even worth voteing on

She needs her job until after the divorce is final

It's always the job. Man works too hard, woman sleeps with her boss. Marriage self-destructs. Then we wonder, was it worth the extra five bucks an hour?

3 stars

Nice, quick, and clean.

Net, sweet, and complete.

C'mon folks, it's a day, not a life.

This is a decent part 1 of the story. Where the rest of it? I can only give u 2 points for half a story.

just wish it was longer!!!

For everyone asking for more, read the damn description.... it’s a FLASH story. That means it’s a one page one off ..... duh!

Good start. But wheres the rest of the story?

Strike while the iron is hot. He may never have another day this good.

I think there should be more to this store leaves you hanging

Get that bitch fired. Never mind the fact that when you divorce her, she will be unemployed, increasing significantly the amount of alimony you'll have to pay.

Short and sweet.

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I don't believe that is so. Sure he was the one who showed proof of what was going on but the fact it was going on would weigh heavily in the court hearing when it came to Alimony.

She lost her job for cause and that is that. He is not on the hook for any money. A good lawyer would be able to argue that if it was not for her actions and if she had have kept her knees together then she would still have a job AND a marriage. She may still get half the assets but that is it.

Now to finish the story.

Teri had to move away as no-one would employ her. She eventually found a reasonable paying job about 500 miles away and was able to live reasonably well.

Randolf, however, was a different matter. His wife divorced him and took him to the cleaners. She was awarded child support and half of the assets. Randy Randolf struggled to find a job paying any where near what he was accustomed to but eventually found an entry level job about 400 miles away. Due to the fact that he had failed to pay child support while looking for a job the Court seized his one remaining valuable asset, his car, and forced the sale of said vehicle.

Without a car and limited finances he very rarely got to see his kids. They eventually forgot who he was and did not see the sense of seeing him. They were better off without him as all he did, while visiting them, is complain how his life was and how bad everything was.

One night as he left a hotel bar he was mugged and he was taken to hospital but seeing as he did not have insurance he did not receive the best of care and lived his life with the damage done. He never had sex again as his testicles had to be removed. Even though one could have been saved IF HE HAD MONEY OR INSURANCE seeing as he had neither they were both removed.

Even to this day if someone says the name Teri or anything sounding similar he yells "I regret ever meeting that bitch".

Then she gets $$$$ in alimony because he got her fired!!!!

Good story.

He gets her fired and then he'll have to pay her alimony with no chance to recoup any money from the Company the cheaters worked for? Not too smart.

It could be a much longer story getting to the truth of what was really going on and for how long.

its a nice start of a story, but wheres the rest of it. Half a story only gets half a score.

I liked the husband's immediate, decisive action. Unless he can file under adultery, however, her being fired likely will mean paying more to be to rid of her. A no fault divorce will probably require he pay alimony. Hopefully his promotion can be timed so that the payments are based on his prior salary.

Good flash read.

Great story. Non of humiliation shite thats written. Another ch saying how husband did. Take no notice of all the dam writers. Their just perverts.

There is no plot twists, no character development, it's not erotic - shouldn't even be here.

This guy gets even...but that's all their is to this story...another author who is a wimp... the wifes affair is the story...but know way do we see what she feels here...this story ends way to soon an a big let down a the end...........

Hi, would have loved to see 5his through the divorce, good story.

Good short, I loved it, Thank You 5***** and a smiley face!!

Very short and just great.

And xx

...and still wish there was more. This is classic JPB story telling which begs for more. This LW's flash story just begs for continuation.

I see potential scences of confrontation with the cheating spouses by the husband, the cheated on wife, the employer and the aftermath.

(1) starts with the conversation between the cheaters taking the call from the employer.

(2) the confrontation at work with the returning cheater/employees.

(3) ...after that it could fall 3 or 4 different ways.

What a terrific little flash story. *****

SlipperySaddleBum has just won the internet for Stupidest Comment Ever.

Congratulations, that one functioning brain cell is working overtime for you.

Why oh why would he give the slightest fuck HOW it started? Would that bend, alter or soften the impact of what she'd done or the FACT that she's a lying, cheating, backstabbing SLUT??

She and her fuck buddy were SUPPOSED to be working with a CUSTOMER so she lied to her boss and STOLE hours of her income while getting fucked by the co-worker that she was cheating on her husband with.

There's an attitude adjustment called for.

The authoritarian leaders of the big mouthed know-it-all Liberal Socialist Progressive Chickenfuckers, so grossly lacking in common sense or qualifications gained only from life experiences should be unmercifully beaten to a bloody pulp with four foot lengths of steel rebar.

Don't look now but, the way things are going, it could be that they, their followers and co-sissies aren't too far from sharing that experience.

There's a rule in life that I just invented. It goes... "If you fuck with the Bull, long enough, you'll get the horn." Everyone with intelligence should Pay Heed to it. There are a whole lot of Bulls out there who're beginning to realize that they've stayed quiet for TOO GOD DAMNED LONG. We will NOT go the way of the Buffalo, who couldn't defend themselves. We will NOT be herded or stampeded but we WILL hurry to STOP or simply stomp the shit out of bullies who try to dictate to us.

This nearly fourteen year old story gets five stars from me.... ten if I could give them.

Nice short story.

However I would like to ha e heard about the aftermath of her actions. Did she plead with him or try to offer an explanation of how it happened? Still a good story from a good writer.

So good yet, I would love to read an, 'aftermath' on the cheating wife and her lover detailing the 'shit hitting the fan' stuff.

Flash of greatness!

This is my kind of JPB story. Burned.

I blinked and the story was over. I don't know whether to surprise my wife by taking off early and coming home unannounced, or to stick to my routine and arriving home at 7 PM. Proof is easy to get thanks to an iPhone and no more he said she said problems. Why am I beginning to like BTB stories?

I admire that and it made the story something different and a cut above. He kept his head, did what he had to do, and moved on. Excellent!

Definitely a Great Day for our hero, a shitty day for his cheating skank wife. *****

Not a thing!

hard work and lots of luck certainly pays off. TK U MLJ LV NV

This story proves you can command attention with a short story. No tedious repetitions. No meaningless begging and lies. An excellent 5-Star story.

It is even shorter than "A Dish served Cold" You've outdone yourself with this one! Burn the bitch and the bastard one time! Toast they are! Thanks for sharing!!!

Sure, he got rid of a cheating wife, and even got her fired with her paramour.

Problem is, unless they live in one of those fault states or he had the foresight to make her sign a prenup, he'll now on the hook, big time, for alimony. Which sucks, but no way any courtroom let this slut get kick out of a fifteen years marriage without something.

Hopefully, they don't have kids. Maybe Rob could even sue Cunningham for alienation of affections. In any case, always better to pay a backstabbing skank to stay away than to keep her around.

This was a good Bob.

the cell phone of Randall Cunningham?

Short and sweet then put it to sleep.

This story screams for and epilogue!

The clicking noises a cell phone makes when you use the camera are just sound effects to mimic a shutter, because that's what people expect from a camera.

You can turn them off in the settings.

Rob needed to get Teri's boss to wait until after the divorce to fire her. Rob will end up having to pay alimony because she now makes much less than he does...

COULD HAVE PANNED IT OUT FAR MORE AND MADE IT REALLY GOOD...

Nothing in the story as written is novel, enticing, thought provoking or original. When I got to your end, I felt that I'd just gotten past the setup phase and was waiting for some intriguing plot line to unfold.

I've noticed this sort of treatment on a good number of your voluminous portfolio. Perhaps you need a writing vacation and stop writing for the sake of writing. You're much more talented a writer to spend you time tossing off such unworthy drivel.

WHY was it not a longer story. It would not have been a 4 page story.

Way to go Rob.

...Heart Break Hotel story....damn ending just drops off..still...5..Stars!

...got screwed over in the divorce because he rushed and didn't bother to protect himself and his assets.

Do you know what would make this story super awesome? An epilog of how it went after Rob found out about Teri's affrair.

It was a Fantastic Day! 5*.

Would like a continuation.

The only problem, will her lack of a job affect the alimony?

Short and sweet and to the point. No bs here, no cuckold here. Just goodbye.

This is the kind of story I like to read late at night. Short and to the point. After all, you did warn it was a 'flash story'. Deserving of five stars.

JPB, a terrific flash story, you are like an experienced surgeon wielding a scalpel.

What I am wondering is, all these annoyingmousies, in the comments to a multitude of stories by different authors. I am wondering if the ones whining about how the stories are all too short and the petulant complaints about how the stories are too long?

I am wondering if they are the same ignorant dullards?

This one with a great JPB ending! One thing I would point is that JPB seems to feel that all women are more then ready to step out on their spouses!

I think this needs a second chapter

and alimony... this woman will need to leave town.. she has to start a new life with no strings to the past... I would imagine the wife would sign off, return alimony and/or vanish...Yes, alimony not delivered to her would end up in some state treasury for the benefit of the state...after a period of time back to court to remove requirement for payment

Unless they had a good prenup he should have waited until the divorce was final to get her fired.

Funny, he seemed to be a calm, even cold guy but that was a revenge move that could bite him in the ass.

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