All Comments on 'A Great Friend'

... you have the story telling ability of a first year school kid!

A story needs to flow, not just be a collection of sentences!!

Oh, that's right, I can tell by the writing, you're 12.

How old are you? I'm guessing you might be 12 or 13. One of the characters is 30-years old, but looks "much younger". So what do you mean? That he looks like he is 20? There are 20-year olds who look like geeks, but then there are guys who are 40 or 50 who look hot.

I couldn't read past the first few paragraphs. So poorly written. The grammar is awful. The continuity is non existent.

Under-age "author".

Does it count as child porn if it's an attempt at porn, written by a child?

So bad it's funny