All Comments on 'A Hollywood Story'

Another big question; did the two sons ever forgive their father?

A sad, yet good, tale.

Loved the story and the powerful implication of the message. Gave it 4 stars because I thought it needed a little more detail in the build up.

Thanks.

Ah, you’re one of those dumbfucks that puts death into the story because you can’t write a good ending huh

Confusing and awkward

The fact he forgave her after her death, and you showing her after her death telling him why and finding out he forgave her, 5 stars.

Needs a hint when she visits that she's non-coperal.

I liked it, and gave it 4 stars. Nice plot twist at the end, wasn't expecting that. Felt a little short though, not quite a "flash story", but just a short story.

Keep up the good work. I really enjoy your stories.

Normally I dont think stories that end in death work because the dead person never suffers, the people left behind do. This works better than most because it comes as a twist. I give it top marks for style.

He became delusional ... 5*

at last a cheating but truly remorseful cheater, doing the right thing. A response to "bacchant2" comment re-"dead person never suffers", he is correct in that if i want revenge on someone, death is not my intent cuz then the person i want to cause pain to, doesnt feel any pain for long, in that vein the desired revenge wld leave my victim perp stud predator fully aware and sane but crippled to the point of infantileness(?), ie they need some one to feed them, wipe they ass, dress and undress them, put them in wheelchair etc. My revenge wld be to leave them totally helpless except for their ability to remember what they did, and who put them in the condition they are in, leaving them wanting to die, to kill themselves but lacking the physical ability to do so. Thats a good revenge. Now about a cheater killing themselves instead of dragging their victim spouse thru the court system, trying to ruin the person they already victimized by cheating on them is akin to kicking their "loved one" when theyre on the ground, despicable. But cheating, being found out and quickly resolving everything w/ suicide, that almost make the cheater redeemable. rk

She appeared with a halo {glow?} about {around?} her which I attributed to the sun off the ocean.

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Something to suggest she's not real/solid?

The ones that get strange behind your back and then add more humiliation are the ones that love you most.

That took a twist at the end!!

I love what happened to the AP!

Excellent !

A strange and unsettling tale. Five stars for a story that needs a final proofreading.

JPB NOT BOB

I'm surprised more of these cheating wife stories don't end like this.

5 stars

It's interesting because she loves him so much she literally refuses to live without him yet she heaped humiliation and disrespect upon him in the most egregious manner possible. Screaming out during the torrid sex so everyone knows. Sucking another man's dick while he's talking to her husband. Christ, man.

Hell of a story. Sounds like a good Netflix mini series.

You wrote: Doug thought to himself, 'Oh God, It just keeps getting worse and worse.' It was, hands down, the most godawful, deplorable pitch for a TV show in history. And he had once been pitched a reboot of the 1980s TV series "The Facts of Life" but set in a Nevada brothel. With Mrs. Garrett as the madame."

I WOULD WATCH THAT!!

A great story but an incredible heartache.

No wife who sucks her lovers cock, while on the phone with her husband, would kill herself. Ever. Ope not ever. She would t weep if he killed himself either. Special

Kind of cruelty to rub hubbys nose in it like that.

Very well written but i always say that death leaves a story without end, no satisfaction for those behind and no revenge, so pointless really.