A hot soak

@VeronicaVenus Thank you for the feedback. Not obnoxious at all, it's my first story and I love the input.

I've gotten quite a few responses about the chunky paragraphs and that's something I'm working on for my next story.

Uniform sentences is a great point and something I hadn't noticed.

Thanks again. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I'm honored I was your first comment.

This is actually my first comment, so forgive me if I cross a line, or otherwise say something obnoxious.

Overall, lovely story. Fairly romantic, well written, and I was fully invested. Most of my issues come with editing. I won't mention much in terms of grammar, specially because I think you're a good writer, and those mistakes are somewhat easy to fix with a more careful eye. However, you could improve a bit in paragraph structuring. The sentences tend to drone on a bit, a few times they reach a boring rhythm, and they just sort of mesh together. They are well written, don't get me wrong, it's more about how you string them together. Like this:

"Kate closed her eyes and sipped the red while his rugged hands worked. Rob always insisted he didn't have any massage training but his aptitude belied the assertion. As Rob's fingers pressed deep into her aching muscles Kate let out a quiet moan. She felt a twitch of approval against the small of her back as Rob's swollen member grew larger. "

You kinda see how the sentences have sort of the same length? They start to blend together after a while, and it becomes harder to concentrate. If I were you, I would add shorter sentences punctuating certain moments. More commas can also help. I would also break the paragraphs more, they seem a bit long.

Hopefully I wasn't too harsh, I did love the story, otherwise I wouldn't have criticized! As far as content, I can't complain. Please continue writing, and have a good day.

I appreciate the comments. It is just a short first foray for me but I'm glad you like it.

I'll plead innocence on lay/lie since it's dialogue and quite a common mistake people use while speaking but thank you for the great notes and hopefully you enjoyed the read.

If you want specifics:

Numbers under 100 need to be written out, e.g. "eight years" not "8 years".

Quite a few punctuation errors, e.g, "Just finished it, everything looks good." You need a period after "it".

Grammar error: "I just want to get home and lay down." LIE down. Objects lay and people lie.

"Her other hand still hiding her sex from Rob's lascivious looks." That is not a sentence. Either change it to "hid" or make it part of the preceding sentence: "Kate reached up with one hand to undo her bra WHILE her other hand still HID her sex from Rob's lascivious looks."

I hope this is helpful.

This is a lovely romance story which needs to be continued. As it is, it is much too short.