All Comments on 'A House Full of Women Ch. 01'

Vanessa needs to move in with him and eventually give him another child.

Very sexy story -- and I wonder about descriptions. I know Vanessa is small-breasted, but very incredibly sexy and desirous of Jack. We know Jack has a big man-cock and lots of man cream to to deposit in her, but how about his appearance? Does he have a hairy chest and abs? That would be a good feel for her tiny breasts to nestle against a rugged hairy chest, I think. They seem to fit together fairly well, and they can learn well from each other.

What a sweet story!

Very well done, credible, delicate yet erotic.

Lovely story. The two characters are well drawn and engaging. I really liked your description of Jack's appreciation of Vanessa's beauty. And I liked the contrast in the way they experienced their interaction---Jack looking back through his experiences with other women, Vanessa trying her best to orient herself based on girlfriend gossip, The lack of concern about protection was a bit unsettling---everything else about the story seemed realistic and emotionally true. All in all, though, a sensitive, intelligent story, a pleasure to read, Thanks for sharing it.

love her, and quite a first-time evening...!

tho surprised you made him so big...even experienced women might have some problems with 8", so a very petite virgin-!?!

looking forward to Ch 2-!

5 and fave

Good story. I like it a lot. AAAA++++

You have surprised me, most stories I read on here are bullshit, men saying how big their dick is or the women do everything known to mankind. I am just being bluntyly honest with you. You have a great way of story telling and I like it so I will probably read all your stories. Thanks again...Gary

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This was a very sweet and special tale. But I am compelled to correct your usage of the word "paroxysm" since you used it twice, both times wrong.

Here: "sought to prolong her paroxysm to unheard-of lengths.";

And again near the end here: "As they were both relaxing after their paroxysms, teasing each other's genitals..."

Paroxysm is NOT a synonym for Orgasm. The definition for paroxysm as you intended to use it is: "a sudden attack or violent expression of a particular emotion or activity."

That means that proper usage of the word "paroxysm" ALWAYS requires a qualifying phrase, such as "a paroxysm of laughter" or "a paroxysm of emotion". In your case, you should have written something like "He sought to prolong her paroxysm of passion to unheard-of lengths" to describe the orgasm.

I enjoyed the story otherwise and I would have still given you a five if you had only slipped up once. But the incorrect usage of a word in order to impress the reader with your extensive vocabulary is an agregious error. You lost a point for that. 4/5