by Bananasanddonuts
Too much chatter going on there. Made it hard to stay interested.
But - hey - thanks for trying :-)
I am enjoying this series, I hope you keep it going, it's very interesting to see where the characters are headed.
Thanks for your time and effort.
I had been wondering where they were going to buy condoms, since most stores would be blown away by the hurricane.
It was good that Chassidy took matters on her own and fucked him, which I hope Marissa will go ahead and fuck him too.
The one thing they have to do is make a pledge between the two sisters,that there won't be any jealousy between the two of them, and they will always think of Jerry first.
Thanks for the good read
A very nice story. The card game was a little confusing 'til it started. I look forward to the next chapter (where Marissa loses her virginity).
This series so far is great. You've got to keep writing. This is one of the best stories I've ever read, it has the perfect amount of love,foreplay, and sex that makes it great.
Love the concept, like the way it is preceding now. Can't wait for the next chapter.
you can not leave us here. They have talked about being a new family, do they truely move in that direction with children? Do the sisters ever express their love for eachother or is it only shown to Jerry?
This has gret potential for many more chapters.
Keep writing.
He's popped one sister's cherry and put his semen into her, now he's gotta do the same to the other. Please keep writing and have him do the other and get them both pregnant! They are a family now anyways!
if you are not going to finish this series then DELETE it. it is never acceptable to leave a story unfinished and the readers hanging. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A WHOLE LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR AND EITHER FINISH WHAT YOU START OR DON'T START AT ALL.
going on a year and no third chapter this ass is wasting our time and the sites space these chapters would have been better left unposted half a story is worse than no story.
To the two commenters below, The reason Bananas and Donuts hasn't finished this story is that her computer privileges were taken away when the screws discovered she had been accessing a restricted site (also known as Literotica)
Lieutenant S. Brooks
Arizona corrections dept.
i say BULLSHIT to the ass below he can't even get the gender straight this writer is just plain LAZY AND STUPID.
i think you really need to start writing again, and even if you were banned for using a computer 2 years a go, i cant believe it would be for 2 years u need to get back on the horse
I couldn't put it better myself! The ONLY problem with this submission is that you left it where you did. Come on now... Hook us up!
Damn! Damn damn damn damn damn!!! I would kill for a chapter three right about now! Damn! I was crossing my fingers and hoping both sisters would lose it this chapter :(
Pleeeeeeeeease write another chapter!!! :)
....im also thinking he's gonna need a good chiropractor, hehe, if he was eating marissa while she was sitting with her legs spread and he was up on his knees giving his other sister play room, while he has his face basically shoved in the floor and both hands up on her tits! Lol. Either all his weight was on his neck or he was hanging on her tits, hehe, either way his neck is seriously messed up!! ;)
This is a story that should keep going. It shows how real love can be, I would suggest there to be a continuation of this.
Wow...you left us hanging like that...I really hope everything in your life is going well, and that your lack of writing is due to something other than negative issue (especially in the world we live in now!!)
Again, developed the sibling relationship so well, how they feel, emotionally and physically, toward each other. Makes the whole thing thatuch better!!
Another FIVE**5**STARS!!!!!🌌🌌🌌🌌🌌🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥💯🌋🌋🌋🌋🌋