by StormyNite
Well thought out and composed. I found it to be a moving short story.
5🌟's
If her back was to you? Basics like that make your writing not believable.
I appreciate that this story was written way-back-when but it would have been improved if you had given us a little background on Kristian and Melissa. It's obvious from the context that they are pen-pals, computer pals, something of that ilk but it would have been better to explain to the reader.
Liked your other stories a lot, especially "When your near me." Just wanted to mention how annoying it is to read a story (this one) that keeps saying "you did this and you ...." When I read that it just confuses me and I have to try and translate that in my mind into meaning, "Someone did this and someone ...." Obviously I didn't do that and I am not the "you" This could be a writers choice but I absolutely hate this, so just wanted to mention it. I also realize this was written a long time ago and I didn't find this in your other stories so you are probably already beyond this. Anyway, just a hopefully constructive comment.