All Comments on 'A Lazy Mage Quests (Un)EZ Creds Ch. 10'

Sorry about this chapter. I am not really happy with it, but after 2 revisions and time starting to draw out between postings, I went ahead and published it.

I wanted to flesh out the universe a bit, especially in how it differs from Shadowrun, which is a huge influence, and introduce more of the main character's background. But I am worried I didn't do enough or do it very well, causing only confusion instead of generating interest and foreshadowing.

This chapter might be a little "soft" on detail but I thought it added an air of Rev being somewhat out of sorts and detached following the entanglement with the chop shop people and the astral projection. Not to worry. You have a good story going. Keep at it. I can't wait for the next bit.