All Comments on 'A Life Not My Own Ch. 02'

and the Echo sex is a very nice distraction

DAMSEL Approved

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Read this story. I can't vouch for all of it, but the first two chapters are damn near genius. Tear off your category blinders, and read some fine friggin' writing.

Seriously, 1 comment, and 7000 views? About a million of you are really missing out.

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Sincerely yours - TTT

TTT, I agree with your praise for FS high quality of story telling.

As to why so many people avoid reading FinalStands terrific stories. In my opinion, it is quite simple. Comprehending an FS story demands a mental effort that many of the visitors to this site are unwilling to attempt. Or are intellectually incompetent to achieve.

Also, I love the Christian College one.

Honestly, with Finalstand, I like his stories more than for the sex in them.

I'm just stunned... it's like an erotic Jason Bourne FanFic, only written by Ludlum.

Simply fantastic writing, compelling characters and truly deep story telling.

Thanks so much for sharing your talent!

I really enjoy your stories and characters. The sex is just a fun side and it is nice to follow a good plot.

...some people are too easily amused. Another example of the "Super-Man, James Bond, Giant Cocked, Super Intellectual Super Human story. Please, can't someone write a story with REAL BELIEVABLE characters???

Do you care to address those issues you brought up? This is a fiction and in fiction it is allowable to create characters that stretch credibility for the sake of a story. An 'Everyman' would be dead by now ... because he is an Everyman and the plot requires a very special (impossible) person to forge ahead. I have written stories about 'Everymen' and Godlings and many of the characters in-between. I apologize if this story wasn't to your tastes, but the story starts out with the premise the protagonist is a hyper-intelligent person and sought after because of that.

@ Anonymous

Geniuses DO exist. To pretend otherwise is a testament to intellectual insecurity at best. Moreover, this is porn FFS. Thus far this is well-written story whose characters are true to the version of reality they are in. Whilst some light editing is in order, particularly for coloqiulisms, the fundamental nature of this story is fantasy. Like most erotic tales, they work best if you try suspending your disbelief for a bit.

Really great story, am enjoying the journey so far and looking forward to the next two chapters.Thank you for your writing.

Maybe everyone else has read stories with geniuses, but I haven't. I find Dominic's abilities very intriguing.

But if he IS able to remember everything he's read, then he shouldn't make spelling or vocabulary errors. It's 'changing tack' (not 'changing tact') - it's a sailing expression. Also, he uses 'passed' instead of 'past' a few times. There were a couple of others, but those were the two that struck me.

They didn't spoil the story, though. I'll keep reading.

After a brilliant start, ch 2 suffers from risen reader expectations and a bit less brilliant execution. The plot and style is a bit over the top, less balanced on a sharp knife than ch 1 was. Some editing might pave over over some misinterpretations or gaps. But also overall chapter plot line might be worth to reconsider.

Still, it was not a burden to read, just a bit less positive surprising than ch 1.

It's a bit much, I can't get into it because I just keep hearing your other characters everywhere, it's like you have 3 or 4 templates that all of your characters are based on

I like it, but it's sloppy.

Love the racy chat between them all. This is fast flowing great ripping yarn.

Scores 5/5