All Comments on 'A Little Imagination'

Great tale. Right to the point. Enough said.

Although a short followup to see the just rewards they reap would be entertaining! Good job!

Thank you for sharing it with us. It is unfortunate that can end a story saying there will be no sequel and right off the bat, you get a request for a sequel. Sometimes I wonder why you guys take comments at all.

Methinks I read this story once before, but it was posted today as a new one.

This story was posted on another site earlier and is posted on Lit for the first time.

I have multiple scenarios for what happened next in my head... I am just not sure if there is enough to actually fill enough pages for a sequel.

Nice but totally impossible flash story. And there is a camera showing the inside of almost every jail and many show the inside of the cells too.

In my country the husband dies resisting arrest. Maybe the officer that shoot him be separated from the force and rehired in another city or state.

was the chief fucking the detectives wife too? It reads like the lawyer just wants to raise doubts in the detectives mind, but it also reads like he has proof from the P.I. report. All I'm saying is that it was confusing. Beyond that, I do find it hard to believe the jail cell wasn't under surveliance and monitored. What I really liked about this, is that so many feel like the legal system will fail them, and if you are smart enough, you just might get the legal system to work FOR you. Thanks for a thought provoking flash story.

It seems quite plausible in most instances with possible exemption of actually finding a wife who was so pathetically inept at hiding the steps of her betrayal. Maybe she was so enthralled with her fuck toy that she lost all sense of logic, but I doubt it. Maybe she was very bright and was very gullible which would explain her initial involvement with another man, although that seems a little weak too. The Chief of Police is one we would think is too bright to become ensnared by the husband but elevation in a police force does not necessarily mean intellect rather it means political savvy. Lastly with a strong pre-nup in place that specifically stated that adultery was grounds for divorce and would leave the adulterous wife with only what she brought into the marriage should have been a very strong deterrent to cheating. So that leaves the stupid wife angle the most likely.

and an interesting twist to the normal getting revenge and BTB story.

I agree with others that a sequel would be nice. It's fairly obvious that James has everything under control but it would be interesting to see the author's take on how and how much the Chief and the wife suffer and what happens after the news conference.

Thanks for the hard work and please keep the stories coming.

Woodmanone

Now one of the good writers, like yourself, needs to finish it.

Leave it like that.

Fine the way it is though I would have liked "YOUR" imagination to develop the repercussions of the affair

These stories may be a bit of fun from time to time but they are really very frustrating. I can imagine shit on my own. I come here to read a story. You know with a beginning, middle and end.

Short and to the point!

No beginning or end, but that is not a problem for me!

However -

It requires that the police respond using formal actions, when in fact I think they would do the work off the time sheet.... you would have to have everything you do on video to catch a policeman doing "work" after hours.

Interesting idea which has been not as developed as some of those in the LW genre. It does show up though - I can remember at least one on setting up the couple for a legal fall, and one similar to set up the cop - "Desperate Measures" by Papatoad for the last is a bit of enjoyable silliness. Recommended.

Green-something

and follow it through....the outcome is always unknown, TK U MLJ LV NV

Great way for retribution against a public official who should know better and a skank who got to big for her britches.

This is awesome, please continue.

Well thought out. Loved it.

And we get bad Dick Tracy.

Sick story from sick mind.

I Liked It ! I am not a NAZI but offer this mild assessment. Only misspelled word I noticed was "Precinct". Grammar was appropriate. Story line was easy to follow.

For all we know from the story the wife takes him to the cleaners in the divorce. Maybe his prenup sucked. Maybe she hired a hit man and had him killed. Maybe she had him beaten weekly for the rest of his life. Maybe, maybe ,maybe. That's the problem with a story with no ending.

Me like story. Nice of you to let our imaginations finish it.

The most erotic part (and only if you're a masochist) is the self-broken nose! Caught, of course, on video - as it was happening and still on the DVD!)

Otherwise, I really enjoyed it!

This with some of your earlier stories should give you the honor of being crowned the king of HALFASS STORIES. But at least they are well written. Thanks for sharing what little bit you did with us.

If you couldn't be bothered to re-read your first draft, why the fuck should we be bothered to read it?

This story is one that displays creative originality --- conceptually A+, carried out with fine tuning!

for, as another poster, "chytown," said the author's doing a "half story."

the story is, obviously, well thought-out and written, from beginning to its half-end...

and for that half-end stunt, I almost gave the author a 4-star rating; but IT IS a really good little half-story.

I really like the PERRY MASON-ish quality of it; I used to love the Perry Mason shows, when I was young. But then I never watched a really juicy Perry Mason episode that just unceremoniously ended in the middle of an oral argument session.

(Odd tidbits: Shows and books like PERRY MASON, etc are what have DISTORTED some people into fantasizing that the past --- the further into the past you go, the better, they say --- was easier, better, with better morality and ethics, since the bad guy was always in the court room, or within the law, MERELY awaiting the story line to end, so they could just get up and say, "Yeah, it's me. I did it.")

Nonetheless, I gave the author a 5-star rating, due to the half-story's FUN, well half-though-out nature. 'Tis TRULY one of those "no pain, no gain" stories!

Improbable but well written, you arrogant bastard.

I thought it was rushed then too. I think you're an O.K writer but you are constantly writing half-ass stories. Every single one of your stories are half-assed. It's like you get bored pretty quickly with the story or you run out of things to write about, which would explain you posting the same story you posted on SOL. I used to have you as my favorite writer but your continuously shitty endings forced me to remove you. If you don't care enough to fully invest in a story plot/ending why write it? Like in this story, what happened to the wife & the chief? You might don't think it's relevant but I do. From the comments I can see I'm not the only one who thinks you're a bit lazy when it comes to your stories they are all rushed, with no ending leaving readers annoyed and unsatisfied

It's a shame that the good stories always seem to have a shortened or cliff hanger endings. These non WACC stories are getting very rare this section so when one comes along you want it to last for pages!!! You can never get enough of a good story in this section. Thanks and craft us another one please

Just another author trying and failing to be clever by not finishing his story and leaving it to the reader's imagination. It was a good start, clever even, but either you ran out of imaginative endings or just couldn't think of one. BAH!

If you can`t write and finish a story the fuck off. Finished would have been a sure 5 stars but this useless unfinished shit gets none!!

is going to happen ,,no matter what, TK U MLJ LV NV

And perfect -

Short sweet - the audience must - for a change - think on it's own for a change.

The blanks are all drawn and there is very little filling in to do - let's make it easy - he wins!. The details on your minds are the fun part of how well he wins lol

I was seriously laughing over this one. Fun read and I'd love to read more about this one but still...good read.

Any sequel would just drag us through the divorce, recriminations, etc. etc.Blah, blah blah.

There's plenty of 'finished' stories out there. Use your imagination!

Good story, Good twist. Thanks for writing it.

boom, oops, busted, done like a kipper ---nice short and to the point would love another one page just to see them burn lol

Another tale which seems to point out that cheaters are the stupidest people on the planet.

In a very good way. I hope DD returns with more of her trademark writing style. (Very little Nazi work would have been needed.)

but:

"This story is about a cleaver twist that a cuckolded man thinks of to get his pound of flesh without a carving knife."

you don't need a carving knife when you are twisting a cleaver.

lol

Great imaginative twist on an overworked theme. Well done.

Only because you didn't finishthedamnstory!

I meant, of course, to say "...Nazi grammar..."

Great start but not even an ounce of flesh. He said vs. They said all within a holding cell.

I. for one, don't want to "think" about an ending. I want it spelled out for me in print. I want to see if the wife gets a smart attorney, beats the charges, has the pre-nup overturned and gets her pound of flesh. I want to follow the husband around while he plots against the wife, makes sure every person she knows gets copies of the pictures of her infidelity. I don't like to "assume". I makes an as out of you and me. BAH!

Then you should have completed the story. If you want to write a quick flash story, make sure it tells the entire story without the reader wanting to know more about the characters and the why and where. There was something most certainly going to happen after the end of what was written but the author either didn't care to elaborate or figured the reader needed to make up their own story finish. Authors write to entertain their readers. An author who doesn't finish a story is like a magician who shows you an empty hat and then tells you to imaging a rabbit hopping out of it.

No sequel is necessary. The flow of the story was considerably rushed; but considering content, reading entertainment, and originality, it was extraordinarily well written and deserving of praise.

This is the sorriest story I ever read u gave no thought to the plot or characters u need build up a u wrote was basically 9ne paragraph

but of course it's not one of the great classics of literature. Very few of those old and dead writers contribute to this site. But it was funny and it was engaging and it was a phantasy of what could happen in a more just world.

With today's problems between the public and the police; it would have been recorded when he broke his nose. Also, the PI's and the cops are a close fraternity. The PI would have given the Chief a heads up on the investigation.

and now the world turns leaving all the rubble in the wake. TK U MLJ LV NV

IMHO, it was funnier than Abbot and Costello could ever be. You naysayers kiss old DD's ass, probably make your breath smell better.

Hey, it is your story. You do not want to finish it, you do not have to.

That being said, it COULD have been a good story.

It was a little creative and original, I will give it that much.

But as a complete story, it sucked.

Regardless of what you think, it does need a sequel or more to the end.

More bile from the dr, this time guised under passive aggression.

Thank you dr for your wonderful uplifting insights!

..... but very entertaining.

5 *

What the hell, use the little brains you geniuses possess and try to write any of a multitude of equally probable endings. The author certainly gives you that possibility!

done.

It's 2013 this year there are already high tech security cameras. Where is this precinct?

The way things work it still may not turn out well for the intrepid hero but at least the cheaters pay a price.

I don't consider it unfinished. More than enough info provided to reach a conclusion.

a man with balls and smarts

so rare today in our fucked up society

A great little story, that I,

as others, would've loved

being a little longer.

All the important details

are here though.

Therefore it gets top ratings from me.

I really wish you would use that twisted mind to do a.longer story. It would be a winner.

Yeah, I wish the author would have continued the story enough to detail the ruination of the police chief. I think it would have been interesting. Still, a good story.

They are creative, imaginative, and very original. This was a great story!

"You will have to come to the prescient and answer a few questions." He said.

If they are prescient, why would he need to answer the questions? They would already know the answers. Sometimes typos are just too perfect to ignore :)

I do have issue with the broken nose, not because of cameras etc, but having had mine broken 4 times, it would take a special kind of resolve to break your own nose for the pain involved and the angle required, probably more likely to brush his cheek or eye, which would have worked.

And I don't think that patrol man is going to last long with his "I'm afraid..." (that grated).

The rest was just a bit of good fun, cheers.

As for the sequel....but, but, feed me? Feed Me!

FEED ME SEYMOUR FEED ME!!

The only result a sequel would bring would be all the boring details and legal wrangling (highly disected by all the lawyers and lawyer wannabes, using the differences in laws from all 50 states, and other countries, too!). Yes, I too would love to hear how the chief and the wandering wifey publicly fell on their faces, but it would be tedious at best. No, this story is complete as is. I guess we’ll all have to use a little imagination... lol

This writer has a brilliant imagination. He could use an introduction to spell check though.

His lawyer's name was Danny Crow?

I missed it on my first read, but a few years before

this story was released here, there was a lawyer

in the TV series "Boston Legal" called Danny Crane.

If dangerouslydead was saluting the series,

that gets him extra credit from me.

IMHO "Boston Legal" is the best the yanks

have done, in comedy/drama TV, since "Mash".

Anyway, liked the story as much as the first time around.

Brilliant thinking!

My imagination says that after to Chief was thoroughly demonized in the press, the mayor fired him on the spot. Trudy quietly and promptly left town. Howzat?

I don't think I could break my own nose deliberately, but I do understand the motivation in this case. This is a fun story!

This story is unfinished. What there is of it is fairly clever. But the real meat of the story is missing. What happens to the Chief? What happens to his wife? Does he sue the Police Department? Is his pre-nup upheld? So many questions. So little time. But I don't WANT to use my imagination. I want to read it. Thanks for the effort, but this was a failure to finish.

Good.little story. I can imagine an ending, but would rather read one.

LAZY, finish your fucking stories, it is NOT CLEVER to leave them UNFINISHED.

This one quit while it was ahead. I was definitely in to it.

Enjoyed And revenge and enjoyed

It isn't easy to take the police chief down, but I was along for the ride every step of the way.

I’m sorry but I’ve got to admit though the story was fantastic as others have said it already. You became lazy at the end this story was fantastic the start was brilliant. The middle was brilliant and it kept me on the edge of my seat. Then you spoil it by saying to use your own imagination on the ending. But what you forget is yes people have great imagination yours included. But what people prefer is that they want the writer to give his take on the story not tell people to use there own imagination. It puts the writer in poor prospective that tells the readers that the writer has got a poor imagination and creativity. And to top it off tells people that his attention span is extremely poor. Just loved to know how on earth are you going to earn respect from people if you keep doing this to them . This was a extremely fantastic story and it clearly shows that you are extremely talented But your will power or your willingness to not finish the story paints a poor picture of you being weak . You have got a talent but you are to scared to use it properly. You need to stand up and say this is how it should end. And not say oh that will do or pretend to have a “ brain freeze “ because I’m to scared to finish this. You need to stand up and become the next papatoad or the next harddaysKnight or the next saddletramp1956 or the next TheMarlboroMan etc. You need to show people what you can do go show them and stop being so silly by not finishing your stories .

Too abrupt an ending. Otherwise, nice story.

While if the writer wanted to continue there is more that could be done with it, there is also the danger that the start is so good that the story has to go downhill a little. I like it as it is. 5 stars.

Reading again.I hope the demonstration stays peaceful.

Really a Writer who can't end His own Story is that what this is?

There's so much more potential to this story and you are trying so hard to "not" be a great writer. I don't write but I recognize talent. You have it. Finish the story. :)

What is with the readers here? This great story is over but they keep asking for more. Well, here's another ending for you, just like I tell my kids: "And he lived happily ever after."

The husband got his pound of flesh. 5 stars for the husband

It's not a flash story just because you quit writing it. 1 star

5*

Superb !

Why did you stop writing ?

Sure, there's no need for a resolution, like there's no need for icing on a cake. But in both cases, you can feel its absence. Was a good flash story, but tapered off at the end.

4 stars for this weird short story. However, I did like it for the original content.

Deducted a star for the poor spelling and lack of editing.

Very nice one.

I am beginning to like your work.

great story, but you REALLY need to work on your spelling, grammer, etc.

I truly wish that you would continue writing stories with your special twist.

Жаль что этот прекрасный автор больше не печатайте!

Надеюсь что у него всё хорошо!!!!

Спасибо

This story is about a cleaver twist that a cuckolded man thinks of to get his pound of flesh without a carving knife.

At least you didn't say it was a clever twist.

You might wish to think again about using "Nazi" in your introduction, even when pissed off by some spell checking.