by joodle
Nice twist, changing the POV. I'll have to consider that as I write.
I found this both over the top and thoroughly grounded at the same time -- a difficult needle to thread. Your characterizations are tack sharp and the sex sizzles. Nice work, Joodle.
Thanks JB. Normally I prefer writing in the man's POV (if you read my other work this will be obvious--tread carefully), but in this case it just made more sense this way. The intro with his POV was to give the reader a glimpse into his humanity, and the reason why he was acting like such a jerk. Thanks for your nice comment! :) J
A very well written and enjoyable story. It tricked me by thinking it would be told by the man, but was instead told by 'the little girl.' Five stars from me. Nice job, JB