All Comments on 'A Little Stretch Never Hurt Anybody'

by Daniellethebabydoll

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Did you even pass English class?

Horrible flow and punctuation makes it so hard to read.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
You REALLY need an editor.

This obviously wasn't even read a second time. Awful.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
fabulous

fabulous story - reading it made me smile.

luver233luver233over 8 years ago
Run-on

A run-on is a sentence in which two *or more* independent clauses (i.e., complete sentences) are joined without an appropriate punctuation or conjunction

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Hey! Enough with the stupid comments! This is an unbridled sex story. Grammar, punctuation doesn't mean shit if the writing illustrates what's happening. In fact, it reflects what's happening. Keep writing "stretching " stories. Loved it.

Uber stickler for grammar here.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Waste of time

Thank god it was short.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Liked it a lot

It read almost like stream of conciousness, it was hot and was, for me, a fairly realistic representation of a sexual scene. Ignore the haters and keep writing!

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
srupid + gay

i hated it u dick head

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Totally confused

In the first paragraph, you write "...kiss your neck and rub your cock" then by the 4th paragraph, this person has a clit? Seems like the narrator was first having sex with a guy that changed into a girl? Actually, I think the narrator changed from the girl to the guy. This confusion detracts from the story because the reader is going "Huh?" Please get an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Enough with the stupid comments?

How about enough of the stupid stories.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Danielle?

Are you the Danielle I remember? Mercy HS? This fantasy sounds so familiar...

merrySMmerrySMover 4 years ago
So disappointng

Whaaaa?

WTF is this?

smoken_10smoken_10over 2 years ago

Why don't you snob-nosed duds -in-bed write something.? At least they have the balls to try. And practice makes perfect . Keep at it

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