All Comments on 'A Long Time from Home Ch. 03'

The story is really fascinating and I am enjoying your writing style. When it is complete, you probably should consider having it published, at least getting in touch with a publisher. Help from a publisher/editor would definitely make it more polished. I have one specific remark though: consider having the part with Rita's memory isolated in a separate section. Reading it right in the middle of a running section made it a little confusing. The transition from Ivan's thoughts to Rita's thoughts was not very smooth.

Thanks you for the feedback and after having read the section again, I agree that there should have been a sharper line between Rita's thoughts and the rest,

AIs (e.g. chatGPT) are quite useful: "Did any eclipses occur near the winter solstice in 1246BCE?"

According to NASA’s website, there was a partial solar eclipse on December 23, 1246 BCE, which was close to the winter solstice in the Northern Hemisphere. The eclipse was visible in parts of Africa, Europe, and Asia. The maximum obscuration of the Sun was about 65%. 🌒

I know :) The date of birth was chosen with the help of the NASA's homepage. Mostly because I wrote the start of this story before AI' were invented :) If they HAD been invented back then, it would have saved me a ton of research. Anyway, thank you for commenting on it.

Really enjoying this story so far.

The Mrs and I stayed at a B&B a few years back outside of Malaga. The description of where they are staying sounds just like it. :)