All Comments on 'A Long Time from Home Ch. 17'

Sorry for a bit of a critique.

While I have enjoyed this story, it is going sooo slow. Perhaps it is the short chapters that contribute to how slow it feels. The chapters on the olden times, feel too seperate and do not seem to flow well for me.

The storyline, itself, is a great one, though.

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Critique is okay :) After looking through the chapters again, I found myself agreeing with you, as the short chapters made it seem slower, than when I'm reading the document. Consequently, I'll try to make the chapters longer from now on, whenever that is possible.

Bravo, in my humble opinion, a great story so far, with tremendous possibilities for future chapters. In this readers mind many more are possible, but of course I am not writing the tale. Seriously look forward to much more.

Actually I haven't found it slow at all. I find in a lot of stories that are largely sex as this one, it gets a bit repetitive but not this one! As you say it's the journey, not the destination