by qualitywheat
I think Loving Wives is a better fit. But Mature is acceptable.
She is a bad woman.
. . . . but you Brits do it your way, don't you. It's okay, I guess, but to me, awkward. "I'd love to shag her fanny" doesn't hit the bulls-eye like "pussy."
.I liked the story. Have only one constructive critique. I'd rather you let your characters tell the story of what they are doing rather than the narrator (the lovely lady) simply describe it for me. In other words, more dialogue, less description.
This is the most realistic and best short story
That I have read on Lit and I have read a lot.
Go girl. So much so I may write you an email
With a tale for you to run with.
Thank you.
Peter