All Comments on 'A Mage's Tale Ch. 09'

. . . Well Done: great story craft and fabulous weaving of morality/compassion into the tale. THANKS!

Nice to see you getting into the groove of writing and or picking better editors. Each chapter seems better grammatically and written than the last. Storyboard entertaining. Thank yoy.

The other 2 comments are wrong. This is better than earlier, but there's no way to count this as story craft or weaving anything. It's an outline. It's talking heads. The curt note that 'sex happened' dropped in once in a while makes me wonder if you understand what this site is about. Or what narrative is about. If you're not going to convey the experience, then why don't you just go to the logical conclusion of this style and write the chapter up as a bullet list (with footnotes that the protagonist is homo superior in each topic area brought up in the outline). smh