All Comments on 'A Magical Prom Night'

i love this story and yes to part 2 5 stars

Amazing story

Great story... love to see her pregnant, and the other girl become part of the couple, making a MGF, and eventually pregnant too.

What a wonderful first story. Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to more.

good stuff- thanks

Thank you so much - I loved it!

I'm a fan! 5 🌟. Well done.

you had some issues with the viewpoint of the story, and were a bit sloppy with things like Julia being 8 years older, then 8 years younger. Good premise, but it was diminished in impact by the carelessness of the editing.

Love the story, first off. Second is I look forward to part two when you finish it. For a first story it is really great. Don't give up and don't take these negative comment as personal attacks. Contact me if you could use and editor.

I caught the same editing errors, but the way you subtly brought out the hidden love and passion between the two, I didn't downgrade my score. I look forward to the next chapter. So many possibilities... I suspect Jillian and Janice set them up knowing what the end result was going to be. 5*

I loved it and am eager to read more of your wonderful story.

I very much liked the story and would like this to continue

I know you didn't turn this story into your Professor for a grade come on people this is a free site If you want perfect go buy a book

I thought you told a wonderful story and very romantic, I can't wait for the next part. My only issue was the use of both Jackson and Jack, it threw off the flow of reading.

You did an excellent job with this story. I am a romantic anyway. This being your first offering into Literotica.....GREAT JOB! Continue writing these types of stories!

Good story. While I liked it you had a few grammatical errors throughout it, especially towards the end. But, I'm not a grammar Nazi and won't allow a few mistakes to sully an otherwise great read! Please write more, can't wait to read from you again.

5 stars looking forward to chapter 2.

I just loved the story and hope you will continue the story. I would like to see where Jackson and Julia goes from there. So please continue with the story. Just one thing you need to check the grammar and get someone to edited it for you.

Looking forward to seeing where you go with this and how you deal with all of the issues that arise.

Mixing up tenses and names.

Please don't write in the present tense - it's very difficult to do convincingly or consistently.

PLease don't give all the femalke characters names with the same initial - you definitely got them mixed up several times.

Lit's 5-star system is too inflexible - I don't 'Hate' it,but it's not really good enough for an 'Average'

Would like to see where this story goes

Superior in every way to the original. You have adopted the tenses of the original in part and then changed, could do with some editing.

can't wait for more of this story

Excellent work especially for your first story. I loved it and am eager for more as they make a life together and even make babies.

Very sweet story. Thank you. I look forward to the next installment.

More! MORE!

I hope that you do intend this story, can't wait to read more.

Wonderful story. Waiting for the continuation.

Very nice chapter. Keep up the good work.

Very sweet and romantic story. Now, what happens with the other part of this "Threesome"?

Excellent story. Please continue.

Possibly Julia gets pregnant and they invite Reiley to join them.

They Reiley gets pregnant. and the three of

them live together, as a three some.

Great story CB_Girl_Dani, I would love to see more to come of this story. Thank you very much I really enjoyed the story. Thank you again

Okay...better than the original. The only problem that I see is Riley. He started to connect with her emotionally when they kissed goodnight at Riley's house. Monday morning is going to be awkward when he and Riley cross paths again at school now that he's basically committed to a relationship with his Aunt.

Writing the Aunt in as a twenty-six year old virgin was slightly odd, but not outrageous or unbelievable. 😳 I absolutely loved that you styled Julia as a doppelganger for Alexandra Daddario. I started crushing on Alexandra when I first saw her in Percy Jackson And The Lightning Thief. How ironic that your main character was named Jackson in both the original story and your reboot. 🤔

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I'm glad that I read this because it reminded me of a good friend that I have lost touch with over the years. He has a blood relative Aunt named Catherine who is actually 2 years younger than he is. When I first met Catherine, I made the faux pas of calling her his cousin, but he was polite about correcting me. I'm going to create a fictional story based on that scenario now that I have had my memory triggered. Thanks for the inspiration! 5/5

Great story! It would be even better if you would make the past and present tense one or the other.

Absolutely beautiful story *****+**. I especially loved the segment where he rescued Riley from an otherwise dismal evening. It would have been even nicer if you could have somehow incorporated her into his erotic relationship with Julia. Please stay in touch with your prolific muse. Small suggestion is to have a proof reader review your efforts . . . . .

The best story I have read on this site. Romantic and sexy. Clever conversation and great to read even without the sex. The firsI two chapters stand alone. Five plus stars. Julia Ann Lawrence is my favorite female character and the sexiest in my opinion.