All Comments on 'A Man At Last'

so you lose your virginity to a drunk passed out sister...what a way to give it up...

It's hear, not here. Work on your spelling and puncuation ...............

Like the other respondent said, you need to work on spelling and using the correct form of words. Ex. there and their. Crotch not crutch. Otherwise keep trying you could be very good.

I liked the idea, but the execution sucked: being how the story was written. You are in serious need of a good editor.

He could seduce his sister, planning for a long seduction by being really loving to her and then get her drunk and fuck her all night long.

technicly it is rape since she was passed out and could not give consent next time think before posting this should be in the nonconsent/reluctance area

bady exicuted, good idea though